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A sneak peak into the Mc's previous life;
In Danmachi with Plasmids
Anime & Comics · Abadom
Hope you pass it!
ch 0 3 I'll be back December 18
Swordsman of Teyvat (STORY REVAMPED)
Video Games · SpeedwagonDrip
Welcome back!!!
Purposely meeting Number 2
Just Another MHA Fanfic
Anime & Comics · SyberisLevoca
It's okay, author! I'm just glad that the story wasn't dropped. I can't even imagine how many stories with great potential have gone on hiatus suddenly without warning. Good luck, and we look forward to your return!
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Swordsman of Teyvat (STORY REVAMPED)
Video Games · SpeedwagonDrip
Have a good day and stay safe too, author!
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Swordsman of Teyvat (STORY REVAMPED)
Video Games · SpeedwagonDrip
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Genshin Impact, Breezing Through Teyvat
Video Games · Stick_Swinger
It'd be cool if you could explore worlds like Halo, Dark Souls, World of Warcraft, etc.
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Reborn in MHA with a diet SCP-4001
Anime & Comics · GoldFinger
I believe you meant the word "blushing" instead of "brushing". A part of this paragraph could be written as "I could've sworn that I saw a slight blush appear on her face."
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Madara Uchiha in TBATE
Anime & Comics · A_Sinner
It's all good. Better delayed a bit than never
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Swordsman of Teyvat (STORY REVAMPED)
Video Games · SpeedwagonDrip
Thank you for the chapter! Although I wanted to add more things, I hope that some of my suggestions would be able to help you construct sentences and dialogue in more chapters to come. I'm actually quite embarrassed, nitpicking about the sentences and all that. I didn't mean to offend or say anything bad though. There's no problem with your sentence structures since they are perfectly understandable, but it would be better if you would get to know more about when and where to use capital letters, usage of punctuation marks and some wordplay. This will probably the only time that I'd be trying to correct people's grammar though, and from now on I'll be back to just being a silent reader that minds his own business. Good luck author!
ch 53 The other side
Madara Uchiha in TBATE
Anime & Comics · A_Sinner
I believe that "quite" should be the word instead of "quiet". You can also play around with words a little to make sure you don't repeat the same word twice. "No, quite the opposite actually. I want you to keep an eye on him, make sure to discover everything we need to know about him and ensure that he doesn't get hurt or it will be the end of you."
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Madara Uchiha in TBATE
Anime & Comics · A_Sinner
Don't put commas at the start or right after the end of sentences. I believe it should be, "Why did you ask about him my lord? Do you think he's someone we should dispose of?"
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Madara Uchiha in TBATE
Anime & Comics · A_Sinner
Don't forget to put a question mark (?) at the end of the second sentence. It still a question, so it should be "Does he have any of those?"
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Madara Uchiha in TBATE
Anime & Comics · A_Sinner
Also, the correct spelling would be "in case" instead of "incase" which basically means to enclose or wrap something.
Yes, with more puppets to control, we will destroy the heart and eyes of this city and I'm sure, the destruction of the academy will make him mad. But I need a plan B in case the first one doesn't work.
Madara Uchiha in TBATE
Anime & Comics · A_Sinner
If we were to get to know what a character is thinking of, try to put a ' ' in the start and end of their sentences. The quotation mark " " is basically a speech mark, and it tells us what the character is saying out loud. Putting the quotation mark ' ' before typing and after typing the sentence can help us understand that the character is currently thinking of something inside his/her head.
Yes, with more puppets to control, we will destroy the heart and eyes of this city and I'm sure, the destruction of the academy will make him mad. But I need a plan B in case the first one doesn't work.
Madara Uchiha in TBATE
Anime & Comics · A_Sinner
Since no one dared to claim this dot for a while now, I might as well claim it for myself.
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In Danmachi with Plasmids
Anime & Comics · Abadom