gunna be interesting
ch 0 6 Chapter 5
Video Games · KissMyGloriousAxe
I read this as "i tap into a ball of furry inside me" and had to go back and reread that cause i was just nope nope thats not right
"When I turn into this it's like I tap into this ball of fury inside me. I forgot for a while now, but there is another ball inside me, one made from my colder emotions," I say to Alice as we were walking.
Movies · Anomander_Adaar
Dominance Established!
It was the biggest T-pose in the universe, not that the scientist and technicians knew since it really became popular as a meme on the Internet in 2017. Though it didn't stop them from strangely feeling disrespected and treated as inferior life forms.
Movies · The_Bip_Boop2003
oh god the twisting nether and subsequent other realms now exist in a death world like naruto this can only end splendidly
There are no class limitations; you have access to all the skills in the game,though you'll need the proper level to access them. In simpler terms it means you are a Warlock, Warrior, Mage, Priest, Paladin, Monk, Demon Hunter, Death Knight, Hunter, Rogue, Druid and Shaman at the same time!
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER
awesome keen to see more
ch 0 3 The Build
Video Games · JManM
whats the update schedule on this looking like so i know when to check back in
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Video Games · JManM
Awesome can't wait to read it keep up the good work
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Video Games · JManM
i think the description part hes getting at and i kinda understand it is the whole your on the normandy explore show us what you see don't long wind it though but give us a mental construction of what your seeing (even though we probably know) i personally don't care i know it all off the back of my hand i can visualize it but otherwise this fic is going well can't wait to read more
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Video Games · JManM
it was good easy to read i didn't find myself lost anywhere keep it up, maybe focus a little more on some details like actually explaining what hes making with the armor get some descriptions not long winded mind you to help build the readers visual identification of who grunt is becoming what hes wearing what he looks like and whatnot helps you in the long run too, apart from that keep going your doing quite well
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Video Games · JManM
no harems cheapen stories like this only good for ecchi styled stories centered on comedy even then most of those have the MC only loving one of the "harem" the rest just sort of gravitate toward him
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Movies · Uchiha_Lover21
not gunna lie the feet on that kinda look weird the rest is fine just the feet
So that's when I got an idea and in five years, I made my own hero armor, and I got inspiration from wolves since they are my favorite animal, so made the very first armor of mine. Lycan Knight Mark 1. (Pic Here)
Movies · EC_Wolf
Senzu bean Senju is naruto characters
ch 0 1 Immortal Korin.
Anime & Comics · Mike_Lu
Cliffhanger-kun strikes again damnit
Right so non offensively (you did ask for constructive criticism) your writing in terms of Character building and Character development is non existent, take a look at any decent to good long running fic and you will see a trend that is exactly the same with characters in books, anime, movies ect the character needs to evolve and not immediatly your guy goes from 0-100 reeaalllly fast i almost got whiplash, now onto the story and whatnot itself i have given the same tip to most people who try to use the WISH fic style the long and short of it is just don't your character just ends up being too OP and not enjoyable to read about or people just disagree with your choices making for a toxic audience, if you wish to do a god gives powers do it in a spin the wheel lottery sense and don't give more then one an even bigger tip is give an ability that you can eventually munchkin to this level of power, say for instance the MCU now we know magic (and magic is fkin OP in the marvel universe) is almost entirely reliant on language capabilities use Cipher's powers to immediatly understand any and all languages posed to him you can then push this to its limit by mastering coding and machine languages for making AI and whatnot so much from a seemingly low tier power, this makes for an immensely more engaging narrative with it evolving in the uses of the power the more you actively think about it and if you can translate that into your character growing and learning more as he/she goes awesome, the idea that the powers you get from reincarnating have to immediatly be bullshit actually ruins more fics then helps them in the grand scheme of things, just take say Dragonborn for instance hes not supernaturally gifted or bullcrap with anything hes just dragonborn and had to study his infant years, sure if you don't wanna drag it on through infancy and want to get into the nitty gritty break up your 10 opening chapters into slight time skips nothing massive just so people get details inbetween, also *** scenes and doing smut in general my biggest tip i can give here is ironically people will say go for sexy harem but the biggest receptions and mark ups from reviewers actually comes from a single love interest or even potentially 2 where you can write in a genuine feeling of emotion into the scene allows people to immerse themselves and feel themselves there in a sense. Now all together this fic is and again i don't want to insult you or anything nor discourage you but its pretty bad if your genuinely interested in developing as a writer try look for proof readers and an editor they will catch stuff even just story wise that make little to no sense or are just outright boring it helps more then you can possibly think. I hope i haven't ruined your desire to write but i just wanted to add in some hopefully constructive criticism and hope to seeing your eventual improvements if the case may be you wish to keep writing.
ch 14 Loki’s weapon Thor’s status
Movies · Because_Fanfic
ooh goodie i have been starved for SW/Force Wielding out of universe fanfics for a while since that sith one on FFN stopped updating
ch 0 2 Many Years Later and Heading Off To America
Movies · Not_Yujiro_Hanma
*Insane birdman noises*
"I'll call you Fateweaver," I said while examining my uplifted blade.
Reborn in Danmachi as a Psyker
Anime & Comics · Cruel_Potato