One in the synopsis, get rid of 'gonna,' it does not fit at all! But I will give your story a read. Also, read your work aloud if it makes sense that it is good. I have written over 100+ chapters on my one book, and I know the struggle. All I can say is keep on going, and you will improve to the point you say, "why did I write that?" or "whats was I trying to say?" Trust me; you will kick your own butt late for how bad you once were.
Hi, the author here, I noticed you had sent this out to many other books. I don't know if I would do it as I am editing the first book and uploading it on another site. I appreciate the offer, but I am wary if this is the real deal or not? Plus, getting this is a shock to my system, especially since the version on here is the rough draft. If you can show proof of your offer I might consider. So far I have only you email and what you wrote on this post.
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original Altora: The Chronicles of the Ren-Ky Warriors
Book 1 From the death of his mother and his village. To the path of friendship. Travel with Lovell as he journey's across the world of Altora, as he searches for what is his place within Altora's conflicted world. Join Lovell with others as they try to save their world from the Faremin forces, that are led by Lord Damora himself. Find a story of forbidden love, ancient conflict and a world fill with the wounds of time. Book 2 As time moves, so shall the world. Follow Hunter as he finds his path to who he truly is and where he fits within the war-torn planet of Altora. Book 3 After the devastating fall of their comrade, Lance, Scarlet, Hunter, and Luna take their own paths as they do what they can to as the world seems to crash over them. And with a new looming shadow rising, will this be the end or a new beginning as a cloaked man, dubbed Black Wolf. Who is this mysterious man, and what are his goals? Book 4 While the death of Lovell still lingers in deep in the heart of the Ren-Ky. Fang, Zero, Gale and Zephyr journey to find themselves as they have lost their way. With Black Wolf watching and growing as no one knows who he is or his motives?178 Chs 14 Collections
Oh boy, where to start... Capitalize important places, use ctrl+alt+num- after "there's Ray" Turning it into "there's Ray—an 18 years old...blah blah." Do not overuse the " 's" as it sounds lazy. this is the first paragraph. Heck, even my grammar program is having a hay day. if you ever get on how to word something, look in books or others content. Or shove out $380 (estimated) for Grammarly. It will train you.
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