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aonly9470
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the prophecy reveal is in chapter 3. and give a little idea that she's being deceptive. like her dad giving her a questioning look if she does something excessive, "she frowned, wondering why he hadn't snapped back at her even after her father chastised her for being aggressive." is a way you can put it in without going "I'm not like this. I just want to test him." it breaks flow and is akin to the character telling the reader information.
ch 10 Intense Bathing Session
My Wife is the Asura Empress
Fantasy · thewhitesnow
writing a second reply because the first one doesn't explain well. the internal dialogue about the prophecy can generally be cut out and improve the story, as it leaves the players in suspense about "Why rio?"and so connect with him when he specifically asks lia because she has made a special vow not to harm him
ch 10 Intense Bathing Session
My Wife is the Asura Empress
Fantasy · thewhitesnow
rewrite the dialogues. an example in the first discussion with Rio and the emperor, the internal dialogue is a harsh halt to deliver exposition or characters opinion that can be naturally explained later. the prophecy discussions are a good example. it can be a good way to connect with Rio's wariness that he only tries to solve the mystery when he is alone with the one who vowed to support him.
ch 10 Intense Bathing Session
My Wife is the Asura Empress
Fantasy · thewhitesnow
no discord at the moment as I've been having trouble with inspiration.
ch 50 The Test
Adam Rising
Sci-fi · aonly9470
That's what you get when you try to write a character while you have your own mental problem. I suffer from autism and so have to make my protagonists autistic because you spend the most time in their heads.
"Wait, can't she stay as a soldier?" Adam asked. He felt bad already for being so bad a leader that he had caused Rutemia to become his slave. but the thought of her being nothing but his servant as well as losing her name just pushed him over the edge. He couldn't let her go down like this. even if it was for his own empathy.
Adam Rising
Sci-fi · aonly9470
there is a mental link through the translators so it's easier to convey intent when someone speaks during the translation process. and the translators are connected to the internet at all times
What Adam didn't expect though was his business partner? rival? he wasn't sure what they were at the moment. his translator immediately registered immense surprise coming from the creature. he had already gained a notification that these creatures communicated through scent. so he understood when nothing showed visibly on the creature. "That is... more than I hoped I would receive. are you sure you want to give 20% of your profits to the management of the company?"
Adam Rising
Sci-fi · aonly9470
hopefully within the week. though considering my history? probably in a week's time
ch 37 Interrogation part 1
Adam Rising
Sci-fi · aonly9470
Next Chapter should be tomorrow
ch 35 Never a Dull Moment
Adam Rising
Sci-fi · aonly9470
Anyone know where the chapters 667-690 are posted? Since the author technically censored it
ch 553 The Siege pt 11
Chrysalis
Fantasy · RinoZ
will be trying to pick back up now that christmas is over and my editor is bugging me to get more done
ch 0 3 The Hated Reveal
Adam Rising
Sci-fi · aonly9470
Fixed. chapter 4 was an earlier chapter
ch 0 5 Trouble Arises
Adam Rising
Sci-fi · aonly9470
My editor is finishing a wave of old chapters alongside the next chapter
ch 0 1 Prologue
Adam Rising
Sci-fi · aonly9470
TItus thinks he has everything figured out. Then a great mage descends and a plant horde rises to defend the colony. I cant wait
ch 542 Diplomacy with the damned
Chrysalis
Fantasy · RinoZ
Working on more chapters
ch 32 The Need for Slaves
Adam Rising
Sci-fi · aonly9470
I'm glad you enjoy the story. sadly my innate self and life problems means that the story is unlikely to be what it oculd be, but I'm still trying to get more chapters out
Adam Rising
Sci-fi · aonly9470