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Overall a good read , i like that the mc is weak that changes from standards shonen/op mc. But there's one thing that truly is a problem the writing there's too much paragraph who are in a weird style (a bit like we are reading normally and then suddenly a passage with multiple metaphor and artificial complexity that even feel a bit like IA/Chatgpt passage). Of course i have no idea if its you who writes those passage or an IA(at least transform the writing) i don't say its bad but reading the chapter 22? not sure when he go "hunting " 1/3 paragraph are like that i can understand(even liked ) having one or two passage they can have a bigger impact, a bit poetic but it's just too much. So please tell me if it's tuned down in the future because it completely breaks the immersion.

Hello, so i post my reviews after chapter 11. The story can have a few promising features but there's a bit too much problems. First : The main character feels not only stupid but also a lack in the consistency of his thoughts and actions. [Examples he decides to avoid main cast but go to a gathering encounter the main cast then a week(s) after he decides to go again why ? making the mistake one time is not enough ] that could be resolved if he had decided to change his strat and go let's try to control the yandere. Second: there's something strange with the female character why are they attracted to the original mc it's not explained not shown they instantly go boom he is strong i want him nothing else aren't they genius too isn't there at least an event we can think it's something offscreen but there's not event an hint that they encountered each other. third : plothole - why does the sisters of the mc don't go to school - why does the system disappear (the mc at a moment think "is tha girls affected by the curse " he as a system that send him constant notification when a curse is close or strengthen . and the biggest problem is simple there's already a loops going on in the event week 2 is the same as week 1 and not only the event loop the same exact paragraph pop ups . You said it was not AI but you don't give any response . The author responded to someone saying that a paragraph was copy from another chapters and responded there's a proof reader ? if i resumed good idea nothing new but worth a try But almost certain that's AI . I apologise it its not ai but you will have to give really good arguments .

The End of the World: The King of Two Worlds is the name but if someone find where we can read this i would like to knows

Sorry for the 1 star review but the novel is alteady being translated, The true problem is that you dont say its a translation.

Hello, there is a few problem that came from the lack of writing experience.First make sure to separate two different persons who talk also better use "" Ex:Jack (hello) natsumi (hello)ToJack : "Hello"Natsumi : "Hello"Also use gramarly or chatgpt or anything to check the text. Good luck with the following story.

Yeah the few first chapter was similar and came to check if other knew it well I hope author can respond to that ?I don't care if the beginning is a copy but the "man of the House" had a big flaw the author liked way too much drama and all is book were drama on drama.