Webnovel Author: SilverWalnut - Novel Collection

There is a lot of potential for this story but as of up to where i read this to, (ch 102), the mc has made so many questionable decisions that im surprised he hasn’t been captured for experiments yet. As soon as he found out he was a vampire, he starts beating up bullies with a mask on while also using the gauntlets that a bunch of people saw him take. This leads to some random girl who was stalking him almost immediately figuring out he’s a vampire. If she didn’t love vampires this would be the end of the story since quinn would be a lab rat. What does the mc learn about being caught by a first year student? He names himself blood evolver in the vr game. Then, he uses his skills in the game as if they wouldn’t have a cost in real life. Spamming in against mobs is fine, but showing all of your skills when you have things to hide is stupid beyond reason. After he comes back from the red portal, he names himself blood evolver on the marketplace and sells the crystal the the traveler was supposed to get. What does this tell people? Blood evolver was with ian. Who was he with at the time of his death? Two students. Oh wait theres a blood evolver on the fighting game as well. In the exact time frame where these 2 students were gone, blood evolver never logged in? Must be a coincidence. You see where im going with this. So far we have a 2 dimensional character who doesn’t learn from mistakes and doesn’t make well reasoned decisions. On top of this, he is supposedly an orphan with no special ability that has been bullied for a long time. There are so many questions regarding the mc. What does he do in his free time? Does he have any worldly skills or experiences from having to be alone his whole life? Did he go to school, eat, and then go to bed? Quinn is as blank slate as you can get. There are some grammar and spelling mistakes but those can be infered with context. This updates prerty frequently. Basically, what you have here is a watered down pokemon universe. An extensive world that could go in a whole slew of directions, but ultimately, the mc has something in a lot of shounen that I like to call Ash Ketchum Syndrome. He rushes headfirst without thinking things through, Comes up with a strategy or gimmick to get through the predicament he has inevitably placed himself in (usually through pure luck), and when he gets a new ability or goes somewhere new, he forgets all the potential consequences of his actions and starts over once again. It was a fun read for a while, but I dont really like the mc at all so I’ll be stopping here. Good luck in your future writing endeavors.