Webnovel Author: xSaintPablo - Fanfic Collection

What is your schedule in posting? It’s a bit erratic so I’m unsure when I should be expecting a chapter haha

I hate your writing, its repetive and reads like a bad deadpool monologue.

I have no clue what the ten shadows technique is, what it does and how it would work in Naruto. The only thing you’ve let slip is that it uses chakra instead of cursed energy, that it will make him comparatively end game strong and that’s it. This is something you should have made clear earlier as so ita such a major part of your story, and you can’t expect everyone to know it. Other than that? I have absolutely no clue as of now what he wants to do, what he likes to do, and what he can’t do. You’ve given him a generic Nara personality and thats it lol

At this point, im honestly bored. The man has a literal domain to himself, a dimension where he is god. Why the fuck doesn’t he use the potter wealth to absolutely pimp the place out, but every book he would ever need about available topics related to magic and fucking bounce. He could easily do his whole “leave fliers for the frustrated witch/wizard” gig from the sanctity of his own dimensions with some fun jaunts in between. Literally nothing is happening, and im beyond bored by the lack of progress across the board. The guy has a Longinus for gods sakes and he seems as useless as a standard npc. It might be the lack of chapters, but the slow pace your going is honestly dreadful. I Tried stockpiling five chaoters as that would hopefully help but im out. Maybe your writing with a thousand chapter goal, but remember to keep the chaoters engaging my man!

Is it bad that I could totally see Cynthia becoming a problem for Voldemort, ending in her and her husbands death. Which subsequently leaves their son in a broken vengeful state, that finally serves as the main characters kick in the butt to actively oppose his counterpart?

No problem, would you mind maybe having a conversation author to author? I‘m currently working on something and your style of writing and thinking really got the juices flowing

I read everything in one sitting, and I’m utterly baffled at how good this is! It’a been a while since I found a good hp fic

My man, your LITERALLY one of the best fanfic authors I’ve ever encountered. From your story telling, grammatical skill and pacing to the entertaining and honestly refreshing concepts and main characters! But you end up dropping your stories rather fast, something I can relate to. I feel like you treat your stories like one would relationships, where you fall in love with it, spend hours of tireless effort and pining after all these amazing concept and feelings that come so easily. But the you fall out of love, and all those things that came so easy, just feel like the worlds biggest chore. Then it’s on to your next crush and the cycle repeats itself. If you enjoy doing this, then by all means continue to do so and enjoy your mini verses! But if you wish to perhaps learn to commit to a story, and craft a universe that you won’t fall out of love with? Contact me. A quick idea, would be to create a jump fic. Where the same main character would travel to different worlds and build different power builds, and he wouldn’t be able to bring the power he acquired in one world to the next unless he completes all the objectives. That way you could easily “wipe” the character if you so wish, by penalizing him from either not being able to or not bothering to complete the objectives. But you could also bring for example his skill set from Naruto to dxd. It could also be that if he completes all the objectives, instead of getting a complete skillset, he would get a “perk” that followed him into the next adventure

Is this your fanfic?

This genuinely has potential! Make sure you don’ fall into the trap of unnecessary deaths, but it would be rather interesting to see him develop more of a reckless streak due to this safety net! I don’t know if you’ve read “A Custom-Made demon lord” but his system follows Thea same principles as your proposed editing skill. It would also benefit you to change the system currency from BP (blood points) to something more in line with Danmachi. As the blood points hint in a more vampiric direction if that makes sense. Perhaps it could be vital energy instead?

So the bold text got coded as I posted it so the B´s you see are meant to be text in bold hahaha