good chapter
ch 75 Naruto : Domination: Chapter 75
Anime & Comics · sybife
"The Beam traveld 500 Kilometers " i highly doubt that, i guess meters?
ch 65 Chapter 65 - Last Year 10.
Anime & Comics · RaccoonLeague
is there any chance you find a Way to Distinguish the Talk between Tun and Jon So the reader knows he is not talking with a bird in the sky with his Mouth but with his mind? like "< Tun you see anything?> " or Write in italic or " 'Tun you see anything?' " just using the "" like in normal Speech is realy confusing like with whom he is talking with ? and then yeah with Tun .. but why no one quistion the lunatic who speaks while walking around? Please its such a smal change with a big impact when Jon is Comunicating with his Animals. Thanks
ch 31 Chapter 31
Book&Literature · Arcane_Eso
i agree ,this whole Labyrinth with hIstory stuff is a huge skip for me .
ch 31 Chapter 31
Book&Literature · Arcane_Eso
i Realy like the Story as well, Critque should come along with Propositons and offers and a reason behind it only then someone can discuss it if the author so Desirers. im a Bakerymaster and i accept you cant make anything that 100% of people like , i aim with my bread and Pastrys for like 80% like 800 from 1000 People would enjoy what i make. You have always uneducated sows that enjoy the 1$ bread of a suppermarket or other cheap inferior Products even when they can afford the more Pricy bread (no hate against the poor i dont talk/insult them). End of Day Enjoy the good feedback and take Pride in your work.
ch 84 Chapter 84 - Artican Trade in Westeros 11 (Dorne 09).
Book&Literature · RaccoonLeague
this story gets more confusing as heck...
ch 0 6 Chapeter 6 MARWYN
Book&Literature · daniel_vera
the time shifting perspectives and recaps make the story more confusing than anything. Making the "timeline" Activitys a Mess. Just tell happenings as they happen, ther was not once a üast scene that cleared anything.
ch 0 5 Chapter 5 AEMON
Book&Literature · daniel_vera
Why write Anbushes when Meaning Anbu !? making no sense
ch 21 Chapter 21 - Akame's Determination.
Anime & Comics · RaccoonLeague
any chance name the Werwolves into skinchanger or wargs?
ch 14 Chapter 14
Book&Literature · Arcane_Eso
insane how this storry has 4.66 stars. The Names alone lets you puke blood .. KRAM?!?!? DUDE what is this
ch 0 1 The Benefits of Night Walking
Book&Literature · FanFictionForge
what is "On Behalf of Daeron" mean? like PoV ??can you not invent the tire a new? i saw you had already another story running and you still make rooki mistakes. Please seperate Thougt 'i think' and Speaking "i tell you" chapter 1 i think thats a problem
ch 0 6 Chapter 6
Book&Literature · Arcane_Eso
is this ai Written or Translatet? Different names are thrown about like candy.... realy trash to read
ch 0 2 The Blessed One
TV · azzari
last 3 chapters had WAAAAAY too much history and background information, no one needs 500 words about the character of Tywin becase no one reads a fanfic when you dont know the world or have at least watched the series or read the books.
ch 33 Chapter 33
Dragon from Winterfell
Book&Literature · Arcane_Eso