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One thing that I would love to read: I know this goes against the whole point of the story, but it would be really funny if somehow the MC got hurt—maybe someone got into his mind, or he got physically hurt. The reaction of his servants would be priceless, especially Martha's and Jeanne's.

I have an idea for a chapter. Since you like to mash up a bunch of TV shows, it could be fun if somehow PJ needed a lawyer, and he ended up getting Harvey Specter. It would be entertaining to see PJ giving something to Harvey, like how he has his basketballs, or when Mike won his tennis ball. Harvey could get something from a genius doctor, something that he could brag about in the future.

It's not a bad fruit, it's just soooooo over used. Every single fanfiction that you read the MC somehow get's a shadow clone.

Now, just be careful with adding girls left or right. Don't let your novel be ruined by stuff like this. Focus on battles; let him interact with some girls little by little. Don't make people fall in love with him at first sight. Focus more on battles for a while, and stuff like that. Other than that, a great chapter as always. I'm curious to see what happens next.

See, this was my problem with all the powers. Seeing this fight, he fight more like a ninja from Naruto with all the clones and jutsus, than a Spearman :( But that's me personal opinion tho, great job anyways.

Just a little bit of advice: don't give him too many types of powers; otherwise, you're going to have so much on your hands that you will lose track of what he has. Plus, with more and more powers, I feel like he's going to be further and further from being a lancer, which is his whole thing.

If he ever goes to the DC universe, he should be insanely OP, since there the biblical God is the one above all i think, and beings like Lucifer and Michael are among, if not the strongest in the verse.

It has been a while that I've been wanting to read a novel about Arcane, and this is absolutely gold, my man. Keep up the good work. It's a great novel.

I thought he wanted to stop being part of Urahara's game. What makes him think that Urahara would send him back after defeating Aizen?

That's fair

Well, to your first point, I don't anyone who is about to die would think like that. "Oh, you know what, I'm not even gonna use my full power, cause even if I did I'd still lose, let me just die 🤷🏻‍♂️". And no, I wasn't talking about this, I was talking about the the hand and the foot, the nerf he has right now

I get that, that's excatly my point. He's weaker than Yamamoto, we all knew he was going to lose, so let him fight with all his strenght, why nerf him?

Bro, I really don't get this. Okay, from the beginning, it's understandable that he wouldn't win against Yamamoto, and I don't think anyone would complain about that. So why do they keep nerfing Adam? Even now, after he lost, it seems like he's going to fight with even more nerfs. The guy's going to fight with one hand and one foot. If he couldn't win before, there's not even a shred of enjoyment in reading this fight, not even with the new skill he learned.

Bro, so nothing really changed? At all? Just his intentions? That's so frustating. If he knew, and we all know he knew, that Urahara would just use him for his plans, he could just tried to do something earlier. Maybe had this talk before, that he wold not accept being a pawn in someone elses game, or said that if he felt like he was being manipulated he would fk up his plans or something. Theres thousands of different ways to go about it. Even being thrutfull with his thoughts. But no, he decided to be a pawn and go with how the story should be. The frustating part about this is not even how that's not his personality at all, is also the fact that this IS A FANFICTION, it is supposed to be different from the original story, otherwise why is he there? What is he doing? Just running and complaining? And by the looks of it, he's not even stronger than he was when he got there. I don't get it man

Great story my brother. Keep up the good work!

I don't know, bro. I feel like this nerf (even though it's temporary) is really unnecessary. They just don't want to make him strong from the start. The whole point of his power in Fairy Tail was that his zanpakutou trained him to control his power well enough so he wouldn't hurt himself, and now he has become weaker because he can't control his power? Is he like a hurricane or something? I don't buy it, sorry. With that being said, I really like your story, and you're an awesome writer, my man. :)

Great chapter as always, my man. Just one thing though, and this is my personal preference. I would rather that the MC stayed in Soul Society instead of going to the human world with Kisuke and the other shinigamis. That's already what happens in every fanfiction. Let the MC stay in Soul Society, make a name for himself, get a good position, and everything. That way, when Ichigo goes to SS to rescue Rukia, you can create some interesting interactions between them all.