i would like to add one more thing please develop mc's dungeon as it is a story about a dungeon master. if you need some inspiration about that then there is the novel " dungeon without a system" on a royal road it had 40 chaps last I checked might give you direction for the dungeon.
"Jesus that's a tall tree," Jonathan whispered as he craned his neck to look up.
Fantasy · Done_With_It
I thought there was different religion given that gods are different there in chapter 1
"Jesus that's a tall tree," Jonathan whispered as he craned his neck to look up.
Fantasy · Done_With_It
although I liked the concept of the story I would like to mention a few points 1. story Is progressing very fast-paced in the development of modern techs without much reference to how mc developed it( even though he doesn't have much of a cheat other than the memory of a world in form of a dream). 2. I am getting that you are trying to make a villain of that anti magic faction but they are creating trouble when MC is a non-magic person is not getting to me. 3. I still don't have a proper image of your world in 9 chaps. 4. I think you should read "i-m-the-king-of-technology" just for reference.
ch 0 9 Interrogation: Part 2
Fantasy · MaxLostchild
https://comrademao.com/novel/legendary-pet-shop/
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twice or half
However, even the cheapest car wasn't something Seth could afford. Going from 19 districts to a total of 11 districts, Paris had been reduced by almost twice its original size due to the monster threat.
Fantasy · YoanRoturier
rank(tank)?
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Fantasy · lumydee
this novel is full of cliche moments, face slapping and dangerous levels of nationalism and racism. I have read it till 200 chaps on MTL finally I couldn't tolerate that level of racism and had to stop reading it
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you changed the dino from t rex to carnotour ( I don't know why you used modern dino names in the first place, could have used any names )
Lobion doesn't want to be in the same position as the first time against the carnotaur. That dinosaur forced him and his father to separate! Even today, he still doesn't know if his father managed to escape from the carnotaur or not!
Fantasy · Arsthe_Creation
well then one-sided crush
ch 32 Moving On.
Sci-fi · THE_WORDSMITH
first time seeing so fast broken romance
ch 32 Moving On.
Sci-fi · THE_WORDSMITH
is this book dropped then
ch 214 The Blind Bazaar
Strongest Businessman of the Cultivation World
Eastern · Wise_Weed