"Interesting. Master, master, I wonder how much of your old friend you understand. Oh well, it's now or never."
Eastern · Evil_Dao
Man i dont think you gotta put down your story like that. For what its worth, these boring chapters are actually delicous appetizers before the main course. It’s good build up. On a side note though, I do wish for more context on why the last turf war was important and what it meant to the characters. I can kinda infer that its the last hurrah before he graduates and that’s why its important, but some good build up for this part would sound fun to read; and a way to get more attached to your characters. Keep up the good work!
ch 0 3 Chapter 2: The Silence before the Storm Part 2
Fantasy · LordofKaizen
This was probably one of the more comedic chapters. Though i understand that he doesnt mean what he says in what he will do to her, this chapter and the preceding one just cements how much of a douchebag he is. He is described to have a “quick witted, forked tongue,” but all i see is an over powered douche bag that has a personality that is as in-depth and complex as a thin paper plate. Also, why are conversations described as “chatting”? Where’s some real dialogue to get to know the characters. Like come on. The spirits are intelligent and sentient, dont they have information that could act as fluff, world building, or cement themselves as actual characters than mere tools for the main charcter to discard. Great world. Poor characters.
ch 737 To Escape or Not to Escape
Sci-fi · Twelve-Winged Dark Seraphim
" Way to go... soo happy for you ;)" .
MMORPG : Rebirth Of The Strongest Guild Master
Games · Raj_Shah_7152