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mahi_9119

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if it is bland story part write it in 3rd pov, while if it is some significant events or sentimental turning points use 1st pov as it is easier to show character interaction at a deeper level. This way it will become more interesting to read. But the decision is yours...

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sure. enjoy the break

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thanks for the chap

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why not contracted beast?? having a living being inside oneself is not the best feeling i guess. And this way you can add some master-beastgirl spicy lemon as well... 馃檭馃檭馃榿

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That makes an occasion for massssss releasee...馃槣馃お

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douluo dalu for waifus and face slapping tang san or harry potter, i know its very unusual but the magic there is really convenient for daily life as well as for getting phoenix or basilisk. well atg, todag, danmachi, naruto, overlord, bleach are evergreen choices.

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for nicknme tyrant dragon- due to the tyranny he displayed. or dragon of death- due to high casualties caused by him.

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add nami and give her the lightening fruit... she already posses incredible weather reading ability, with the fruit her senses would be enhanced to extreme and op to boost. also add nojiko as a very caring and loving big sis figure for luffy. ps: a devoted yandere hancock is a must 馃槝

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Dude this is great so far, but don't miss our cat burglar... She has her unique flavour. Also i would love if you add some POVs of the 5 goddesses. And add some mischief from them, i think it would be more entertaining.

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loving your style of writing author

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