Webnovel Author: Jahrik - Novel Collection

So far so good, but oi! I'm longing for chapter 5! The bad: I need more updates. I can stop whenever I want, you're addicted! The word choice is poor in places, like to the point where I've noticed, but the story is so enthralling that it makes up for it. The meh: I need more, come on mei, please? D-don't make me beg. The good: I love the characters and the story! I love how it all comes alive in my head without me needing to go insane trying. Honestly, if you give me more... and maybe let me suggest some edits... s-say, c-can I get a new chapter?

To the review! The good: I like the overall story. The hints of things past and things to come, the troubled heroine, her interactions with various characters, these all help make the world come alive for me. It's hard not giving away anything of the story itself, but I'm thoroughly enjoying it. The bad: Word choice is a bit strange. As an example, I'm going to re-write your first paragraph here the way I'd have written it. She wiped at drool mindlessly with her tiny palm. It had been such a good rest; this was beyond doubt. After such a good night's sleep, well, someone was in a good mood. It had been a perfect, complete night of rest! Compared to the previous night, she was quite satisfied. It's just little things here and there, but as long as 'the bad' looks it really isn't enough to call it 'bad'. Overall: The only thing that I could find to critique was word choice, as it sounds strange to me. Updates are happening at a steady pace. The story has developed in explosively good ways, over all grammar is good, the story is readable. I enjoy the character designs and how they interact like real people would in that situation. Finally, I'm enjoying the world you've shared with us. Almost perfect marks, I look forward to reading more!

Thank you so much, that means the world to me! <3

Totally not because of EXP reasons, but OI! 'The Author' has a name, ya know? It's Sensei. That's funny, because only weebs would call themselves that. It's like calling yourself 'san', it's unheard of except for like... Well, moving on.

Quality is top notch. Seriously, I had to really nitpick to find ANYTHING off. I wish updates were faster, but at least they're consistently delivered. Story so far is moving along nicely. I like that the character's are being fleshed out as we go, not some info dump. The background we've seen so far is pretty top notch as well, so let's get to it! The bad: There's the obvious trope in the beginning with the all girl fighting force you see in Japanese novels these days. The meh: I didn't have anything to meh about. The good: It might be a trope there, but it was delivered in a unique way that I found highly interesting. For that reason, as well as my vested interest in this story, I give this top marks with no reservations. I've added this to my collections. The question is, why haven't YOU?

Aww! Thank you, I always do try my best with these things. I'm looking forward to seeing Ian's slide toward villainy.

I don't even feel bad reviewing my own story. Listen, I'm aware that my MC does some really dumb things. He's very childish... well, he's like... a teenager right now, but I am planning for a series of time skips as the story develops. Does it feel like something is missing? I am tempted to add in extra chapters later on and fill in a bit here and there, but someone flat out copied a few of my friends' works from here, so here's hoping it's all done out of order when they copy paste my stuff. Cheers! Hope you like this one! Randomly, why is the word that begins with t has two ee's in the middle and ends with n censored? Context matters!

I so wanted to do gratuitous violence, but ended up taking a whole new path. I'm excited to see where it goes from here. Thank you for the review! I found yours and added it to my library. ^.^

It's too early to tell, but I think this has the potential to be a very interesting fanfiction. I'm excited to see what happens next! Quality is good, would like faster updates but that's not new.

This feels like Nancy Drew if she were a lawyer instead of a nosy kid. Well, it's not really that similar, but I loved those books (and the Hardy Boys) as a kid and this story fills me with an odd nostalgia. To the review! The good: The hook is good, it draws you in and gets you invested. You care about what happens to these characters, the world seems diverse from what we're allowed to see of it, and I like where it's going so far. The bad: Eh, English is a second language here is my guess. Poor word choice here and there, enough to be noticed, but not so bad as to make this excellent story unreadable. With an editor I could see this being a top seller. Overall: I really liked this story and I'll recommend it to any friend interested in crime/drama/mystery.