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you are right I commented on this when it was in the pilot read

*By Writer - I mean the one who has written this novel. by Author - I means the one who has written the world in which the protagonist is in * There are no grammatical mistakes which shows almost perfect translation quality As is the First Day of this trial read novel there is no point talking about the stability of updates The Title and Synopsis clearly state that the author of the world in which the protagonist has transmigrated to is written by his younger sister before his transmigration, whereas ,the novel states that author is the protagonist itself this might come off as a minor mistake but that's where it is crucial because synopsis states there is communication between two worlds one where the protagonist is [novel world] and [original world] where his sister is present. now synopsis states there is inter-world communication between his sister [novel author] and the protagonist though a notebook [assumed to be a laptop] there is huge potential on this topic in the synopsis but there is no mention of this type of plot or the sister from original world in the story at all but if the author is the protagonist himself then that is too bad because it hard to imagine a novel where the writer would write himself as side character/stepping stone for the protagonist of his own novel to abuse. because it is too masochistic so it is hard to believe. there is even a point in the first few chapters where it is stated as the author in a third party perspective which shows the inconsistency of the plot and it inaccuracy of its grasp by the writer Coming to the Background of the World it is a cultivation novel which is by default set in ancient china or in another universe which is also in ancient times unless mentioned otherwise but the novel clearly states modern time because the chapter starts off in a high school classroom. Now nothing about martial arts names, types/ professions/ cultivation techniques or aura or qi is mentioned only that he chose the best cultivation the original male lead chose a evil cultivation not even their names their style not even the name of the mystic realm now it states that the sister of the protagonist in the novel world has a system so do two other female lead of the novel world if not more which is absolutely not mentioned in the synopsis it is brushed off as the protagonist thinking the plot is inconsistent with the story written plus the story of the [novel world] has not even started so the plot isn't even introduced apart from slight character intro it is stated the protagonist has only this novel which is supposedly good others are very bad. which is extremely poor on the writers part this is just an excuse if this is the case then the writer should at least make a list of major characters and their identities - roles to play in this novel, the writer has not even not talked about any of the plot and stated that the story of the novel world has yet to begun but none of facts are clearly written as to where any cheats are or what characters should the protagonist get on his side or which opportunities to hunt for the world is clearly not properly introduced as are its characters only a one liner introduction this is not how a novel is written !!!! One moment the protagonist doesn't want to offend one of the male leads less than a week later the male lead [Yin Qiang] is dead this male leads suddenly popped up without any mention on top of that he is the son of a super rich CEO are you telling me the CEO cannot even investigate his own sons death in the city that he[YQ] is in, he [YQ] doesn't even have a single bodyguard bullshit how many male leads and female leads are there nothing is told suddenly a character pops up is the protagonist the only side character there is no other side character !!!. even if the plot hasn't started surely there are events that are going on before the plot of the novel world starts it clearly wasn't a harem novel suddenly you are making it into a harem all three female leads except for the biological sister of the novel world have been given the mission to cozy up to the male lead and then become his wife now they are the female leads of this world are you telling me they cant even know the rules before binding she cant even refuse mission like get married to protagonist if refused then death penalty. if the system can overpower the female leads halo then why do you need to give the system to the female lead give it to some supporting character what use does the female lead require the system for in a cultivation world the female leads are obviously pretty they looks will be comparable to heavenly fairies if they want to improve their beauty cant they have some kind of beauty pills or heavenly medicinal ingredients why system is introduced nothing special about the system as long as its a female lead she has to have a system if there is a female lead she has to marry the male lead no one else if there is the original male lead then no matter what he will definitely offend the protagonist and then end up dead What a Joke

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did you get the raw

finally a different style if it doesn't gets picked then it's wasted now most of the novels are genetic and the mc is too overpowered there's no sense of satisfaction the mc grows at God like rate and the novels over all face slapping and it's boring now after reading more of them so hope this isn't one of those generic ones