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Shouldn't she be able to regain biological energy from bio mass like meat and plants?

The reading flow has become a lot smoother and the variation in sentence structure makes it more enjoyable to read. Well done.

I really want to see how she will try to benefit from this situation.

So, this is only a suggestion but if you were able to make less "I" sentences and paraphrase them into other ones that would bring variety into the reading flow.

Will she have a passie mental shield? You know ,against the demons and mind contol in general. Also, her cynical view on them? Absolutely love it. Just wanted to point out there were some minor comma mistakes but nothing too serious.

Ok, thanks.

I am not quiet familiar with the DC time line but will she meet the young justice when she is older?

Personally I think that would make her just like the rest of those other stories and would take the originality out of it. I belive the majority of people are reading this story precisely because the synopsis implies that she will become a villain with a backround of having known the super heroes personally as a child.

I would like to ask again, if she will deal or prepare with some kind of magic in the future. Since we can basically categorise it to science and magic, she should be prepared to deal with Dr Fate or possibly Witch boy and the like in the future. Nice chapter btw and it was longer than usual.

Will she interact with magic one day? You know to cover her potential weaknesses with science and magic. Nice first blood though.

The kids acting out and trying to save others was really annoying to read. But it means you wrote it well.

Her self-awareness of being only a minute excistance in the grand scheme of things really is making this interesting. But could you quickly say again what her ability is?

How about telekinisis? I think it could have a lot of potential to evolve in the future without it being too overpowered.