not to mention, you already sold us on to dislike Kevin, Elena and Eva by showing their true hypocrisy in current timeline, and sold us on the lunatic Leonard who want control or just burn the world down if he cant control tendency. this recap of the past showed no purpose beside solidifying things that we already know. it getting tedious and serve no purpose since Asher like us, know this all along
ch 420 Trap of Memories VI - Nightmare
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
someone is taking the "show dont tell" approach too seriously. i mean, as someone who read ur novel for quite sometime now, with bit of crumbs you left, i think it was more than clear what Asher's past look like and these few chapter is just a repeat of said crumbs you left.
ch 420 Trap of Memories VI - Nightmare
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
a little bit. it went slightly downhill after author was sick. i just re-reappearing after i notice the current stable update rate compare to previous 4 months
ch 419 Trap of Memories V - Crumble
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
understandable. inkstone does do this thing. to fix it, upload using a new draft instead of a used draft which were edited while writing. it always the old edited draft that tent to have this defect due to inkstone autosave function, so copy paste to a new draft and upload that one instead will solve this problem.
ch 419 Trap of Memories V - Crumble
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
why is the chapter keep on repeating. even if it was for words count, this is too much.
ch 419 Trap of Memories V - Crumble
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
o brother privilege, 20 chapters ahead, has the tournament end? xD
ch 367 Trickery
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
been keeping up hope since the very first mention of mass release bro 🤣🤣🤣 it sadly never came true — ever (period)
ch 347 Fourth Day Awaits
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
Rather, I think he will announce the grand opening of the Trial Ground, permitting not only the Ranker who won in the tournament, but also some people of those Elite and Householder choosing, which news will be earthshaking because it has never been done before. It will also attest to "their chance of refusal to what Farnus will announce" and "their greed that Farnus predicted will serve him right".As for revealing Kevin as his apprentice, that would be a stupid move and he knew that too. He had been keeping quiet about already having an apprentice after all, and when Asher told him that he knew, he become even more protective, knowing that if others know, Kevin's pitiful life will be foregone.
ch 337 First Day Ends
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
secondly, i think mc divine punishment should be enough, and no further punishment is necessary. from fat to lean, to handsome to charred, then slow recovery. these should be a good development, and it was better if u use this moment to further his character and throw his naivety
ch 49 Chapter 49 - Male lead 'Kael' and His Justice disease
Fantasy · A4KL
but if you insist, for event that had already happen, consider putting a timestamp on it or some indication that you're talking about the past, before resuming on the present, so as not to confuse the reader.
ch 49 Chapter 49 - Male lead 'Kael' and His Justice disease
Fantasy · A4KL
ur story is great tho, the flow is just right and it look like you already have a clear line ahead so there really isn't anything to comment about, lest we disturb ur story and mess it up
I can't make a firm commitment, but I'll continue writing this novel as long as I receive responses. I've observed that many authors take breaks for months before returning to their novels to attract more viewers, but I must admit I'm rather impatient.
Fantasy · A4KL
lol
I suppose the story is dull since no one is offering any comments. It's like throwing a party, but the only guest is a tumbleweed rolling by. Well, that's a bit hurtful for my writer's ego!
Fantasy · A4KL
this chapter need edits. author, recheck it please.
ch 325 Tournament Annoucement
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
bruh... tht sounded like a curse
ch 278 Failure
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
you're playing with fire bruther... hope u get good grill chicken out of it. or this thing will flop! just take ur time to cook! so long as all these buildup you made born fruit, it will taste sweet regardless of the time it take.
ch 264 Against the World
Fantasy · Raos_IOI
🤣🤣🤣 i did propose a solution, but i guess we will have to see
ch 420 Trap of Memories VI - Nightmare
Why Should I Stop Being a Villain
Fantasy · Raos_IOI