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I'm really looking forward to seeing exactly what his refinement trade can do, imagine if he figures out a way to implement it in the real world to convert, well anything really, into worldly energy (nuclear weapons exist so conservation of energy exists, so with his transmutation ability that seems to only require will power, a basic understanding of atoms, and energy to function, he could literally turn a landfill directly into pure useable energy)

I haven't caught up yet so you may have already done it but, for his archery growth you should have him forge more arrows, he can make different ones with different elements and give them the return ability opening up the possibility of multi-shot techniques, you can also have him forge a completely broken arrow with both a return ability and a split ability (something like eternal split for the runes) that let's him fire one arrow that becomes hundreds

I gotta say I love that he just sits back and lets her handle the enemies of her level and only steps in when there's someone she can't handle, most stories the guy is either stupidly overprotective or just refuses to pass up a fight, this way they're both still gaining experience

why doesn't ray just steal this Blake guys Mana? once Blake loses his abilities it won't matter who his backer is, and if his body can't store it all then he can just share with Jack, Sylvia and whoever else

I can't believe that they won't contract you because of a little I ncest when there are several contracted novels that contain it like: dual cultivation, profane prince, ect. (I remember having read others but I can't think of them at the moment)

I honestly really hope that you continue this novel, your world-building is amazing and it is many many times better than other novels with the same premise, if you want to get away from the R-18 stuff an easy way would be to only give detail when it's a new girl/ situation and just say: " he continued to meet with Rose and Amelia (ect.) everyday to complete his permanent quest earning coins and exp." that way you can focus on the other aspects of the novel, also the occasional quest from his martial system would be great, (like getting into the top three of the tournament). you can totally make it so his dual system is just a cheat to get stronger faster. while I don't expect you to take my ideas seriously I do hope that they might be able to inspire you to keep writing this, or at least give you a spark to build on.

getting much better, one thing I thought of to point out though, you have "inspect" listed as an ability in his status but when talking about him using it you refer to it as a skill, since you said that he can only have 5 skills the distinction may be important in the future. I am absolutely loving this story so far.

I don't think you should limit him to five abilities, you describe the power of chaos as having the ability to make or break rules, so it wouldn't make sense that it is limited by rules, if you were going to limit him I'd make it so that it's a false limit that he perceives himself having only to break free of it at a later time. it's your creation so do what you think is best, I just thought I'd offer a suggestion.

not necessarily better, or more powerful just more convenient/deadly as it uses poison, and considering that it was a lieutenant level totem made with a Lord/Duke level essence rose and most likely the "gold poo" mold it makes sense that it would be strong

agreed, I'm glad he's getting such a cool inheritance but I'm still trying to figure out how angel is better than godslayer. I'm also really hoping that the Titan blood awakens and becomes a rediculously powerful bloodline

you can just do an auxiliary chapter with his harem members basic info. listed, then if a reader forgets someone they can just look at that

wasn't the Wisdom tower that he has an invite to supposed to be one of the supreme organizations?

he definitely formed the 5th amethyst seal in the garden, so this should be the 6th?