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An overall good fanfic, however the direction of the plot was not to my liking. Like it but not love it

No plot, ninjas with limousines, suddenly overpowered, took back girls from Sasuke and girls suddenly question why they cheated in the first place, so they were with him originally? I stopped reading till that part. My brain is cracking just trying to understand this. Definitely not a story telling material, not reread and edited nor well thought out. Here's my problem with this story, 1. Why limousines, even if the story was in modern day times they aren't even that cool nor a sign of status unless we're talking about the 1980s for presidents. 2. Point form only for a story is terrible, a story should have descriptions for the readers to visualize the scene, thought process such as what the MC is thinking so the readers can understand the character's pov along with his mental dilemmas and struggles, feelings should also be said to keep the readers on the right track of where the mood is headed. 3. This is obviously a parody however the characters are too far from their actual characteristics that they look weird and out of place, using an OC (other character) would have been better. Example: Naruto actually has interacted with more girls than Sasuke, while the girls have a thing for him it is his own coldness that pushes them away. Kushina is his (Naruto's) mother so that was a big potential for plot there BECAUSE it is weird for him to lust for her, so make it less weird (incident/s). The sudden power surge could have been give context for better understanding of the readers and for further plot development (playing/abusing with system). That's all i got for now, i'm too tired to go back and reread/finish the story to see if i'm missing any points

Clan restoration act, a bunch of figure heads allowing Danzo who is usually acting in the shadows to publicly announce villagers to used as breeding machines for the sake of preserving bloodlines? Did you even read the manga, Danzo was the one who plotted the Uchiha Massacre to obtain the shisui's sharingan to control people, collect the many sharingans and even went as far as to plot the third hokage assassination with orochimaru, all because he disagreed with his 'soft' ways. He was responsible for Naruto's village hated childhood, fueling it from the back! The fact his Danzo's decision was only rebuked by the third shows this is a world i would gladly root for Madara to successfully reincarnate and win

Rest in peace great author 😖 Your work has won the hearts of hundreds of thousands