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Pikachu can electric shock Spearow quiet a bit doesn't that mean he likes Spearow a lot?

How’s the situation of the true north going? Or what is the progression of Prussian dominance like?

So is this going to be a slow evacuation of the North?

“Put his hand in the sand” you mean “head in the sand” right?

Harry informs the school board of governors and his parents that he found out what was causing the earthquakes closes the school get everyone transferred to school outside the country while the investigation takes place.

Would the Finns after hearing the trouble of crossing the river mark hidden ferries to cross or a submerged bridge to make an easier crossing than the visible guarded bridge?

Would the adopted be allowed to visit their sires? otherwise it feels somewhat cruel to remove them like that

Can we get a report on how much valarian steel collected?

dont like the fact you've got a human in an animal world, and the MC would benefit more from living his life in one world at a time the experience from one world will help him more when he goes into the next then to have multiple worlds all at once

It ain’t slavery it’s serfdom

So, the story's pacing needs work, there are a lot of run-on sentences and you've already committed to it, but your character feels like a tag-along, the MC is following the plotline without giving any original opinions or divergent suggestions, this could have been a Jaune with Naruto semblance.

Her name isn’t phyraa it’s Pyrrha

Stop changing the character’s pronouns

If this is first person double check that you removed all the third person and change it to first person. ex. "He moves his hand to her neck." He moved his hand towards my neck.

OC cabin boy on Garb's ship

the corniest chapter yet

Halberds, shortswords, half-plate, and crossbows for common soldiers, lammerl or ringed gambeson for officers, longswords, axes, mace, kite, or bucklers for bodyguard retinue, cav mix of plate and ringed leather depending on the task, glave or lance, backup with mace or saber, Westerosi don't have a history of missile Cav so that's out, you could bring back javelins with atlatl and ax throwers, but most of the southern kingdoms disdain the tradition so that might be out, bows are a big tradition so that's not going away so you can make a mix of spear and bow levies or keep the bow units for your scouts all up to you

Fire should be changed to ignus

Should have offered Fury the super solider serum.