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*Hao feel even
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*positions in a few
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*Back then when he and *Realm he was faced
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I suppose it's more of a word choice suggestion but thunder is the noise created by lighting (and thunderstrike isn't a word) maybe you were reaching for lightning strike or maybe you like it how it is. It could also read clap of thunder or thunderclap.
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And now I look in the previous chapter too (you've written lighting rather than lightning to be clear)
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Mistake is continued in further paragraphs
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"the dark red lighting clouds"? Making it sound like mood lighting, maybe it should say lightning
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*nascent soul, Chu Yang delete or reword repeated phrase
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It feels wrong that the entire Half Spirit Race would abandon their ancestral home and heritage in less than a year. Having been isolated so long and being wary of strangers you would think they'd take longer to integrate far less leave their homes even if they are only going a short distance away.
Time slowly passed in the Star Shattering Sect and soon enough the entirety of the Half Spirit Race moved into the Seventh Star Peak. Given that all of them were at least in the Qi Condensation Realm, it was not hard for all of the Half Spirit Race to move to the Seventh Star Peak.
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*his disciples moving
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Also the kingdoms ran away and relocated?
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*reason, some of the sects and *decided to take Reads poorly as is, due to using "either" then only presenting one action. Leaving the second disjointed and segregated into a new paragraph.
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*Not long after
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I fear my message was unclear. What I intended to point out is that it is written as Shattering star sect in this paragraph rather than with the name they had decided on or that they changed it to I didn't want to tag it as a spelling mistake incase the character intentionally (or accidentally) replaced the "ed" with a "ing" while speaking casually.
"Why… Didn't we decide on the Shattering Star Sect a few days ago… Why the sudden change!?"
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I feel the servants have been snubbed, not so much as a cursory mention. Will they need reorganising like the disciples? Will they start to break through onto the path of cultivation? Will they have to be expanded so they can take care of the herb garden, larger sect and now 2 outer sects? When will Zhi Ruo ascend to become queen of the servants? So many questions, so few answers.
ch 636 The Seventh Star Peak After 1 Year (3)
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*had also built a
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*be divided into
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I wonder how they'll choose, I can't imagine many would choose to leave the main sect that offers better cultivation prospects.
Thinking about this, Elder Song felt determined to quickly get the Half Spirit Race fully settled down so he could send some of their Nascent Soul Realm Experts out as elders to manage some of the branches under the Star Shattering Sect.
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