ThePhoenix94

ThePhoenix94

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30-something book lover

2019-05-03 Joined Global
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ThePhoenix94
ThePhoenix94
1 months ago
Commented

Did he say this or is it just a random line? Also, your chapter title was repeated as the first sentence in the chapter 👀

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My Taboo Harem!

My Taboo Harem!

Urban · almightyP

ThePhoenix94
ThePhoenix94
1 months ago
Commented

She says good night twice? 👀

ThePhoenix94
ThePhoenix94
1 months ago
Commented

subconsciously* to do something without thinking, like instinct. Unconscious is when you are not awake, for example when in a coma

But even then... her hands unconsciously tightened around Brandon, pulling him a little closer against her body.

Getting spoiled in a woman dominating world

Getting spoiled in a woman dominating world

Fantasy · chayote

ThePhoenix94
ThePhoenix94
1 months ago
Commented

You're suddenly using present tense instead of past tense here 👀 is that deliberate?

The girl is kind, earnest, and full of genuine affection.

Getting spoiled in a woman dominating world

Getting spoiled in a woman dominating world

Fantasy · chayote

ThePhoenix94
ThePhoenix94
1 months ago
Commented

I'm starting to wonder.. Maybe, if Kael ends up being the ancestor of his own wives (multiple/all of them), maybe his & Rheanne's lineages are the ones capable of becoming awakeners? Maybe a bit of an "out there" theory, but I wonder if it's possible and what the implications would be 👀

ThePhoenix94
ThePhoenix94
1 months ago
Replied to chayote

Ooh, revealing a spoiler just like that? 👀

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ThePhoenix94
ThePhoenix94
1 months ago
Commented

I'm flattered you mention me in your story! Thank you, and well done!

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ThePhoenix94
ThePhoenix94
2 months ago
Commented

Oh, so this is some kind of flashback? Would've been very helpful if there was something to indicate that, like a "Flashback: 5 years ago" or similar, at the start. Very confusing to go through these chapters without knowing that part

ThePhoenix94
ThePhoenix94
2 months ago
Commented

Oh, I'm too early. That's unfortunate

ThePhoenix94
ThePhoenix94
2 months ago
Commented

subconscious* not unconscious [img=recommend]

Roxanne watched with eyes wide as harvest moons, lips parted in unconscious awe. Her breath emerged in visible plumes, each exhale a small white flag of surrender to the supernatural chill.

My Taboo Harem!

My Taboo Harem!

Urban · almightyP