Good authors accept criticism I look forward to a good novel :)
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Urban · aspiringmaker
Petty?
It has been four weeks scene dad and I resolved our patty fight.
Fantasy · H2Oz_Anxious
Processed might be a better word manufacturing is making something
'Once preserved like that, the wolf also won't turn into particles as the third party had made preparations for its carcass to be manufactured,' Jake recalled the advice, smiling.
Games · HomieLv1
This is the dumbest paragraph ever….
Anyone can become a great magus by cultivating diligently. But to become the greatest magus, one must follow the arena rules and war laws and defeat their opponent in a lawful way.
Fantasy · PeterPan
His wife clearly doesn’t like him much… or at least she wants benefits..
"According to Grandma, a man should have determination and goals to develop in life. If that is the case, I must win all the combat tournaments from now on, and I must protect Thea. I must not let other men get close to my wife." Kent muttered as he dropped a bronze coin in the pet stand.
Fantasy · PeterPan
You’ve never had shrooms… if you did you’d know you can just eat them.. no need to ‘puff’ on anything
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Urban · aspiringmaker
You’ve never had shrooms or you would no you can just eat them… no need to ’puff’ on anything
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Urban · aspiringmaker
lol that’s not soup it’s salt water… I don’t think you can actually survive on that even with the bread you would die from dehydration and starvation in a few weeks
He then proceeded to eat his meal, comprising only hard bread and a plain soup crafted from water and salt.
Fantasy · Meowder
Would
"We have to do something. He's blaming himself for Ariel's death" Siruis stated. Worried that Avalon will ruin himself.
Fantasy · RealmWeaver
Spent or would spend
After Ariel died, Ember's existence became a symphony of discipline and endurance. She spends practically everyday training.
Fantasy · RealmWeaver
Well that was quick I guess her donner kebab got unmangled right quick? Magic vagine?
"Hmm, we have a baby and a pregnant woman at home, so we need to make some changes in certain areas. Of course, the small parts, the larger areas don't need as much. Let's walk and see," Ye Fan said.
Urban · Silly Little Bok Choy
Audi is German so its not domestic?
It was a Fifth Circle brand, a domestic car with imported equipment, quite nice!
Urban · Silly Little Bok Choy
It’s on this app too lol
Really? Do cats go meow cat cat?
lol
"Please tell me, for our first anatomy class, does the school provide the cadavers, or do we need to prepare our own?"
Urban · Holding an inch ruler
The point of university is to get an education… therefore expanding one’s career options This often leads to a job earning money is useful byproduct of having a job…
"He's about 20 years old, but his temperament is so steady and mature. He's even better than CEO Ma. He's simply like the president of the abstinence department."
First Day In Game, I Got Ten Billion From Infinite Number Of Check-ins
Urban · Ironhead Calabash Brothers