Books_for_life

1yr

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Hmm...🫡...well it's not good.This story has a very very incompetent writing style. For one its not very consistent. Many plot holes(tbh the plot is barely there in the first place).Sexualizes woman🤢 way too much.(in the first chapter one of main characters is almost assaulted and althogh she doesn't let it happen. the narrative then says "its not like she doesn't want it ,its just he was being mean about it."🤐🤨.like ...................HUH. anyways i think you could do a WHOLE lot better than this by first proofreading before posting and also tweaking the premise by a little. maybe don't use sexual assault to start off your story and then make it seem as though the character wanted it😶🤥.also you described the woman as of they are all in some weird porno narrative 😶‍🌫️🫣