Please focus when you write this names and places to be coherent.
Aiden Hawk nodded, "Understood, bring four groups over to establish our intelligence networks in Ice City, Magic Capital, Hong Kong, and Tokyo in the East.
America 1919
Urban · One Yellow Mountain Red
I hope we get more chapters because your losing me author. I was hooked but can’t keep hoping for chapters every week or month
I have no words, to explain how good the story is. Just continue I keep up the good work in the . And I hope if you ever write another story what MC is the librarian of knowledge cause I like that side of our MC.
Thanks for clarifying, I like the way the story is going and I’ll keep reading so keep up the good work
"Don't worry, mom. The bonus I got is in foreign currency and once converted in the monkey currency forced on us in west Africa, it is enough to provide you with some comfort and still leave me with a large part. Just enjoy it, alright? You deserve some rest after all those years of toiling."
Humans' Limits
Fantasy · LifeDayDreams
Pls can you find another name for the currency because using the name “monkey” as a currency is just poor taste because if you could write this story that I’m starting to like then finding a name that doesn’t give bad vibes and awkward feeling knowing that the events are happening in Africa. I’m not saying there aren’t good stories that have racism in them and are blatant about it. It’s just feels disappointing to find good work tarnished by clumsy errors. And if it’s on purpose then don’t take what I said with any consideration. Hopefully it’s the former and just early errors. Thanks for reading and I will continue reading with an open mind.
"Don't worry, mom. The bonus I got is in foreign currency and once converted in the monkey currency forced on us in west Africa, it is enough to provide you with some comfort and still leave me with a large part. Just enjoy it, alright? You deserve some rest after all those years of toiling."
Humans' Limits
Fantasy · LifeDayDreams
I get that he wants a team and that he is new to this Lord stuff by having an experienced betrayal before becoming a Lord. I’m very dubious about him accepting someone who tried to kill him, even with his system protecting him. Trust doesn’t work that way I know it’s fiction, but I would ask that in the world that you created with dog eat dog and all the hype about fighting and the dangers that will happen in two weeks. From where I stand at chapter 5. I feel like that she has been too gullible or naïve. It’s just basically trust. And having him be praised by his summons. So quickly. As you said, you flushed out every side, character. That’s why I feel like you’re pushing the nice guy, Family Guy, team spirit and all of that without any emotional event, that will link us understanding him going towards those thoughts. I would feel like thoughts of companionship, teamwork and empathy would come from experience and if we don’t understand those experiences or what molded his character. It makes us feel like you pushing those emotions down our throats. That’s why I feel like him telling us he wants people with him as companions, respect, mutually, and everything without explaining the why, it feels forced.
His goal was to build a real team. Strong, loyal, and bound by mutual respect. Even if the system guaranteed that none of them could ever harm him, he still wanted something more than control. He wanted companions. Allies. People who chose to stand with him, not just those who were forced to.
Floating Islands: SSS Gacha Lord
Fantasy · Galanteo
I love the premise, the idea is amazing. Just please please give this work the diligence it needs to make it a master at work.
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Adam not adan😂
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Greatest Legacy of the Magus Universe
Fantasy · Esenel
Hey, love the story just started now reading the story. I’m kind of all chapters and there’s something that bothers me is the jealousy between the slave/subordinate and the elf and the Duchess. I know he allows leeway, and that she’s still a kid, and she has some sort of Stockholm syndrome, but as the main character showed us in previous chapters where he was making a line between subordinate and his position, his dark side is being destroyed. the image of him. she wasn’t supposed to be hopefully a love rival and the character doesn’t have any sentimental attachment from what I can read so I hope we won’t lose the main characters darker side of this personality where he’s not a child. He’s a man that has lived experienced so him leaving leeway to his subordinates, I understand, but as his position nobility and his past experiences, he shouldn’t be naïve to let his wilderness get ahead of themselves jealousy I see the comedy side of it, and honestly, the elf is kind of useless and more detriment to the story cause I feel that her wanting to get stronger because of the duchess it’s kind of fast on us and at the same time it feels weak as a resolve, so I hope you’ll develop more than the Duchess and the main character instead of forcing us into a three-way right away rivalry
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original ASTRAVIA
Wei Liang, the forgotten third prince of the Iron Ridge Kingdom, is exiled to the lawless Outer Ring after his brother seizes the throne. Stripped of power, resources, and allies, he is expected to disappear. Armed only with his knowledge of fallen dynasties, Wei Liang begins building something unprecedented—not a sect or rebellion, but a new foundation of order born from choice and governance. As outcasts gather around him, an ancient and unknown cultivation path awakens within his blood. By the time the empire, hidden powers, and ancient families move against him, it is already too late.4 Chs 27 Collections
I want to explain why I gave two stars for the writing. Mainly it’s because your early chapters until at least 2000 to 2400. Maybe 300 were excellent writing explanations, flow, combat. However, after hitting maybe 2700 or 3000 you started changing your style, adding some mythical words and cutting in phrases with one word answers like for example. “ For the first time in over a month, his body felt stable. Whole. He opened his eyes. The world seemed sharper. Clearer. He could feel the immortal essence flowing everywhere within him, responsive and obedient in ways it had never been before. He had not reached the seventh stage. But what he had created was something else entirely. A variant. A deviation.” You didn’t do this in the early chapters or mid chapters. This extract is from chapter 3486. Before you were explaining them and understandable, terms or examples that you were using to compare or or visualize it in a way that the reader can understand it or at least imagine it. Instead of over using softy or make it to mysterious I preferred you when you were in your early days starting to evolve and then in the mid 2000 and early 2000 where you had a solid way of writing. I don’t know if you tried to change it or something changed but I hope that afterwards you come back to your roots of writing because honestly I’m starting to skip chapters because of all the exaggerated and modifying ways of explaining things which is unfortunate for me as a reader
Walker Of The Worlds
Eastern · Grand_Void_Daoist