If only everyday was more interesting.
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For the first point, I don't think an auxiliary chapter is necessary. The mc will explore his powers and ways to use it. I will too, I don't believe that I've found every way to use it and readers will probably give me ideas I haven't thought of that I'll use. The basic explanations of his ability will come in a few more chapters and you can probably imagine the level it can reach. But just because you're going the extra mile I'll tell you the bare minimum is fighting Arishem. And yes, he will look hot asf in the future.
Sending a blast of air towards the door, Storm walked in, followed by Scott and then Jean. In front of them a black haired, average-looking high schooler is sprawled on the floor. His sweat soaking shirt and pajamas, fortunately he didn't manage to piss himself.
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I’ll actually try that and edit them. Thanks
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Heh maybe. The potential mentioned here isn’t purely comparing their mutant abilities but overall since Hugo got something else.
These conjectures and theories about Hugo's ability all seemingly accurate based on past evidence. Little did they know the potential and ability of Hugo although similar to Darwin, is greatly different, his potential dwarfing the latter's by quite a large margin.
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HAHAHA, you made me laugh so hard. I’m dead.
'Shit!' Cursed one of the multiple hidden agents in the area.
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Uhhh, this is a lot. Thanks for the details. Didn’t even know about superpower wiki. I learned a bunch. Still the mc’s power is a little different but pretty similar to all this.
They miraculously achieved to free themselves out of the Mirror Dimension albeit accidently without any magical means. An oversight on her part others would have to pay for.
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Did it feel like this for all chapters? What do you think made it that way?
ch 0 2 Chapter 2: Vision
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I’ll just say the power is limited to the word Immunity. Also I haven’t read Worm so if the ability does look familiar to it, just know it’s accidental and I didn’t get inspiration from it.
The initial reading of Cerebro regarding Hugo's potential while the Professor was using it, is different that what is it now. Increasing little by little every single day, one number at a time.
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No particular reason that I use one or the other. In the context their use should be similar or the same. Is it confusing or is there something I don’t know about?
ch 0 5 Chapter 5: Origin
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True true
The fact that a mutant of lower capacity and potential controlling her should be enough of a motivation.
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Yeah
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Nah
Finally in the middle, sat on couches a girl he doesn't recall or not included in his memories. She has black hair and black eyes. (A/N: Original Character)
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I looked it up again, I see I misunderstood. Thanks for pointing it out, I will correct it.
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I looked at that as well, thanks for the heads up. I got something planned.
ch 0 1 Chapter 1: Seven
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His ability will take care of it. Read on.
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It will be better explained in future chapters.
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By vampire I assume that you meant Rogue. What she saw wasn't all of his memories, but 'bits and pieces' exactly like it was written. It would have been explained further that she didn't see anything that would reveal him reading Marvel as a comic/movie or anything that would point to it. This event will be an integral part of their relationship as the story goes on, that is why only parts of her, seen in the memories are highlighted. It is of your opinion that it's a mistake but it was a deliberate act on my part and I will not be changing it. Even after seeing and thinking of it because of your review. Thank you for taking the time to read.
Marvel: Immunity
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