Is not in Character why would someone who builds a connection based network just burn bridge’s. With someone who has a good network
"I'm not going back if he invites me the next time," said Quinn, bluntly.
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This is not in Character even if you copied it from the book. Slughoorn saw Quinn hugging Marcus so it does not make sense dor Slughoorn to just drop Marcus. If he wants to be on good terms with quinn.
". . . I see," said Slughorn with a smile drained of its previous warmth.
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Thats nearly a perfect copy of the book chapter …
ch 263 Diagon Alley Outing
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I think it's mostly my poor upload schedule but I think I cover could also help.
ch 16 An empty lair
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Uhh good point i will edit the chapter so the soul gets also destroyed :D
ch 16 An empty lair
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I just got to this feature that is also the reason why I answer this late. Yes he will be famous but for other reasons, so there will be no order of the William in that sense.
"Okay I think that's it. Or do you have any other topics you want to talk about. We don't want our poor William here to die of hunger after all." Said Helga with a smirk in my Direction. I shot her a thankful and dragged Rowena out of the office before the others managed to give any protests to the decision.
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I am sorry for the late reply I did not found the time to visit this lovely site. They are the pets of William one is an overly grown Nundu and the other is a crossbreed between a Phoenix and an Occamy.
The commotion outside was of cause because of Typhon and Hope usually they sat in the great hall on my chair and watched the student's.
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There it is possible because as of now the story there has no clear finish yet.
ch 13 Meeting Continues
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The first half of the story is not planned as a harem.
ch 13 Meeting Continues
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Please let me know what you think feedback is very appreciated. I had planned the prologue like that he would tell his everything and after he did continue with 1st person writing, but it seems no one picked up on that. So wasted effort it seems.
ch 11 The End
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ch 11 The End
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The prologue is
ch 11 The End
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Well yes that is a good idea but the stone is not yet invented in that point of time.
ch 10 The beginning
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That was a point I did get. I fixed the paragraph in Chapter 9 to fit the story better. I am sorry if my Story does not fit your taste anymore but I would still like to say my thanks to you for pointing out my ward oversight. I thought of him as a lonely man who was in denial pushing away everything that made him human. With the talk to Hengist I tried to put a focus on that, his suppressed feelings. In retrospective, I should have put a chapter in between that to point that out further, maybe ill do that even now. I see the coming chapters as the first real character development. I still wish you the best of luck finding stories that might suit your taste.
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Well yes and no I guess while I can see your point that it seems weak that he can't defeat a lethifold, one has to note that the lethifold, like the dementhor are the only amortal creatures in the Potterverse they cannot be killed and even back in the books there was just one wizard that had survived a lethifold attack. So I think the feat of killing one, even with help is commendable. Maybe I should have pointed out the horrors that these creatures are in the Potterverse. I will keep that in mind if a similar thing should happen again.
ch 0 4 Collecting friends
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Thank you for your cheering I read every comment and readers like you let me appreciate writing even more.
ch 0 8 Storytime and grief
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Maybe I worded that poorly, he just thought of them like weird dressing freaks he couldn't tell it was the Harry Potter Universe at that time.
Well that sucks it looks like his parents belong to people who would dress like that even in private. He thought so until a man in the back of the room waved with a little stick. He felt the sensation running through his body as he got cleaned by what he presumed to be a spell. At this moment his it dawned on him. He was in the Harry Potter world but the question now was in which year ? Even the wizards in the Harry Potter world where not that backwards that they lived in wooden houses.
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Dear Author you may find this review unreasonable and in that case you are right. How should i evaluate your work if i haven’t read anything of it. And to that i say screw you i will treat your novel like you treat your chapters. Without any respect. If you dont value the rules of this platform don’t expect others to do better. This might turn out to be the best novel ever or maybe the worst but i can’t tell because you did not even write 2000 words so how am i supposed to rate it. On a different tone i wish you the best of luck and hope that you can complete the word count without relying on this damned method. At that point i will delete my review.