Jackal_Zirson - Profile

to preface- i dont mind reposts on here, but you should honestly be dissapointed in yourself, you turned 9 chapters on fanfiction@net into a 80 part webnovel- made false promises about extending it- and have thoroughly pissed me off. learn to write and dont make promises you cant keep

with an app like wattpad, where i expect at best a 4/10 experience, i am happy to say that this is one of the best fanfiction i have ever read, i am sad to see that you haven't updated in two months. however, you should feel proud of what you have made here. alltogether, I'd say this is a 9/10 experience in fanfiction (i have over 1500 fanfiction favorited/read between all sights) and 7/10 as far as books go. keep it up, you have what a great skill.

ok writing but annoying amount of chapters are just advertisements or dumb questions, the author is pandering to his readers more then developing his story, he also asks questions to his readers for the smallest thing slowing down the story, its obvious this is all just a way for him to get more patreon subs.

are you ever gonna write something? like why have this posted if theres nothing here to read and there never will be? i like rwby stories where ruby is the main character so i make sure to check up on this every few months to see if you ever planned on doing *something* bit disappointing you havnt.

4 chapters in one day from the looks of it, all written spectacularly well, and with little to no grammatical or spelling errors to be seen, it may be a bit soon to review for something like this, but i feel it is worth it.

i see no point in having a book posted with no chapters, its extremely annoying ddjdjsjssjsjsjddjdjdjdjdnddjsjdjsjsjsjdsjsjsjzjzjzjsnsjsnssjsjsjsjdjsns