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Well, to be transparent, I only every tried to stick with the original events because I thought that the readers would get upset if I did my own thing, but I already had pretty big plans that would change the Harry potter world, but held back. However, ever since you helped me understand my more subtle mistakes and told me that it wouldn't be a bad thing to go off-script, I have a huge surplus of ideas that I think would help the overall story. If I were to say that it either gave me more flexibility or room to write, I think that it gave me a some wiggle room to express my ideas, although I'm not entirely sure what the difference in flexibility or more room to think is.

Divine17, I have written a multitude of new chapters, and just wanted to see what you thought of the story so far. I've been following your advice, and I hope you'll enjoy the story more when this 'Christmas Break ' is over, and I proceed with the new arc that I have planned for when Quentin returns to Hogwarts.

Right. I know what I'm getting wrong now. (Don't weaken the main character, instead, I have to progressively make him stronger, and I should branch out, and begin to depend on my creativity instead of the original plot line, and make sure that not everything is as dramatic as it was before.) I'll do something about it. Thanks for the advice :)

So, what you are saying, is that I need to tear through the original plot, and add many different events that only concern the MC?

Thanks for pointing those cons out. I've been trying to fix the major problems, and this helps. Also, I've been trying to make the system more relevant, but I just now realized that it needs restrictions, so these last few days, I have been figuring out how to implement these restrictions to the story. And, can you explain the story's cons in more detail?

Got it :)

Yeah, that makes sense. So, should I cease to show flashbacks? I'm not planning anymore for now, but I'd like to know what you think.

Thanks, I'm happy that you enjoy what I write! But, can you give me an example of when I go on a tangent on the details? I'd like to correct myself on that. And, thanks again for telling me where my plot is half-baked.

Any advice on how to implement a sense of control, and what kind of vocabulary should I be using to make my book more understandable? I'm open to advice. Also, thanks for pointing out some of the mistakes you found, it helps :)

I don't plan to :) Thanks for the support!