Kelnok

This is a great story but you should look for someone to proof read your work as there is quite a few places that had mistakes or didn't make sense. Keep on writing as I like the idea of this story.

ch 23 The Fog

DC: Son of Samael

Anime & Comics · Darlau

Kelnok

10mth

Commented

Can you time skip to their return please.

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Kelnok

10mth

Commented

Don't you mean Nova and not Rina?

ch 163 The Ignition

Getting a Technology System in Modern Day

Sci-fi · Agent_047

Kelnok

11mth

Posted

Very repetitive, it feels like I am reading the same chapter again and again.

Konoha Hiro

Anime & Comics · SpecialMocro_DJ

Kelnok

2yr

Posted

I am really enjoying it so far and find myself getting impatient for the next chapters of the story. I am wondering if there will be flashback chapters or will his past be revealed during the future plot.

High Human in Crossed Worlds - A HP x DxD Fic

Book&Literature · DonnutHermit

Kelnok

3yr

Commented

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

ch 86 Victors

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Sports · Mujunel_the_Mystic

Kelnok

3yr

Posted

The first chapter is awful, it is almost painful to read. Even if English is not your first language there is a minimum that should be reached before posting a story or get a beta that can proofread it for you. Until then you should keep working on your stories but not upload them.

Harry Potter- The Fatal Error

Book&Literature · SasunaruUchiha

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