Joshua_Silver - Profile

Great work sad it’ll probably never be finished rating would be higher if not for that as work is well done and while my May seem overshadowed at times I see the potential especially for the time skip. If you want your characte to interact with the main cast and not be overpowered directly then being overshadowed by Tang San is going to happen unless you downgrade him. However the interactions mistakes and character growth is apparen and makes this story quite a fun read for me.

if you enjoyed this I strongly recommend Douluo-dalu 9 treasured sword

well written thus far, though the level of the writers knowledge of the system seems a bit off at least the reaction of the outside characters seems fine, since the system was absorbing the spirt rings for the host thus seems to circumvent the issue but the mental strain of the backlash of said rings never occurring is something of a let down, the hosts ability to break the game in the first 30 seconds with sword birth is somewhat insulting I feel you could have drawn out it more if you wanted to do something along the purifying you'd did with instead of just giving him a purification in the gotcha witch would have served the same purpose but been less world breaking, as it is the mc doesn't really need the dragon or even really the lotus though having it anyways would be fine I could probably with the restrictions you put on it see the user killing just about anything with just sword birth, I actually somewhat want to challenge the author to dose, with another story except really show the struggle and complexity of having such an adaptable ability as a passive, and how you'd need to actually learn to use different types of swords maybe even reincarnate them and give them a second spirt that is non combatant based and thread that into their skill set. the storey outside of those points is fairly well written, as long as you cam suspend at least some of your beliefs in the power scale of the users, considering most of the spirt masters in the actually series don't seem to have real weapon or combat styles outside of use your spirt it is reasonable to jump at least the smaller power gaps as we see repeatedly through the series with skill and strategy. all in all a good story that keeps its mc not intertwined the the series mc. I look forward to seeing thus continue

I enjoy this system very well, well done at showing the powers of the system, was he supposed to be losing money for making the dancer bayblade for Sam's sister i think the numbers might have been off unless it was intentional that he was losing money? Anyways great story egarly awaiting the next chapter, keep writing and ignore the critics.