Matthew_Sorensen

over all would be a decent story except the chapters aren't always in order plus the same chapters are updated repeatedly so it might go chapters 1,2,3,1,2,3,6,4,7,5,6,4,7,5,5,6,7,5,6,7 etc. the story is jumble, and it looks like some chapters were edited sometimes combining chapters or adding slightly different or new things, but old chapters were never deleted and were then reposted along with the edited chapters. Also some information is just missing so even if you get over the mess that the chapters are it will feel like on top of the chapters being out of order there are still missing chapters between the ones that were posted. Overall, it has potential, but the story as a whole needs reworked into proper order.