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Harem is always more interesting since it opens a lot of interaction options for the mc.Despise the non-harem cry, some of the best novels here are harem.It's always amusing to see the interaction of the wife's with different personalities and goals.

Why the f the program broke all paragraphs and grouped it.

The writing style is to frustrating to me. I can't even focus in the history. The author has too many amateur vices like the use of "..." and start all sentences with "He did x", "He saw y".History segment's crash with each other. There is no transition and everything is very descriptive without care for the text elegance. As general rule "x" is spoken dialogues, [x] is system or notification and 'x' is used for internal dialogue. There is no need to Express "he said" all the time when it will just brake the text.The review is not to discourage. I can see author is pretty new to it, but I think it's best to use this novel as a learning base so in the future you can make a more compelling history. PS: There are some calligraphy and styling sites to help fix text.PS2: My English comes from playing RPGs as a kid so I don't think it's particularly good.

MC is pain in the ass. After 8 chapters I can't handle this plot. It's the same old formula, but the system just explains about everything. MC 23:59 - It's a new free life and I don't need to hate the manipuled heroines. MC 00:00 - I'm vengeance. I'll take everything and treat them as prostitutes. And fuck you system that gave me freedom.

Lux... he stinks with harem aura. Well, I just hope to see Zio with a strong pair, not some damsel in distress.

so far looks like the hero of the book will have a harem. I hope not bc that defeats the no-harem tag. And it's kind annoying to read about non mc harem. It's harem with extra steps.

yeah. Chap 14 and idk if I will keep reading. He was supposed to be smart but don't know shit and want to sell legendary items that could help him for just money, something that he can get hunting monsters. It's frustrating to read. 10 chapter of battle to have mc just have stuff handed to him bc he can't use his brain.

Slime but wo everything that makes it great. The plot is rushed and convenient. I love harem, but the sequence of events are ridiculous and mc actions are nonsensical. I know that there is some profound plot behind his actions, but there is no build up to that plot. The reader is throw out of the loop far to many times and a "notes" chapter shouldn't be necessary to fill plotholes.

I like harem as long it's not a pokemon one where he gets a girl each 10 ch. I really like when heroines have their own history and sometimes even clash with the mc. As a royal makes more sense I guess.

I'ts bad. I can't understand the 5 star reviews. -name of mc keeps changing. -mc has high intelligence status, but it's a dumbest mf I ever see. -mc is 5y old with no cheat yet is thrown in a dungeon wo any reason. -mc don't remember a single thing from the novel he wrote, not even the freaking skill of major characters. - it's riddled with plotholes. seriously... rich lady in poor orphanage jus because her parents can't take care of her sometimes? ffs. - 3y old kids that behave like 12y and can run like the wind. - mc that after almost 3y think he still in a dream and will return home anytime now. - Not a single world building. There is guild, portals and monsters, but nothing that is shown because we need to follow the mc in some of the most mundane and brain dead adventures - There is much more, but whatever. The worse part is that the plot has potential, but is extremely wasted for a apparent lack of planning and editing. Also the author posted the same chap 2 times, effectively cutting part of the history. I usually just ignore novels I don't like, and I really like the premise. It's sad to see it wasted.

A much better version rn. MC was to innert and unimportant in the other novel. I hope he keeps the focus and autonomy this time.