Honest_critic1980 - Profile

if your not a big fan of league of legends and Warhammer 40K, you will have a hard time following the story. Example im a big fan of 40k but barly know anything about league's of legend. it seem the author expect you to know all the more of both worlds and fill in the blanks. it goes into a fast pace, but leave a lot unanswer. I like the idea of the story, creating space marine base on league of legend hero's. but it has to be done right. put in the time to at least do a basic description of characters or else it just a confusing mess which just frustrates the reader.

I gladly recommend this story. a different yet well thought out story. dialogue was smooth and transition from fighting was cool. Only down side was the 30 limit on free chapters to read

instead of Sutter I meant Author

how much does the Sutter make and what's the cut this platform take?

I forgot to mention I did like how well the description of background was done and also of other characters

It's ok story so far. the first few chapters could of been writing better. too short for my liking .not long enough to set the mood of story. privilege mc out for revenge ?? I give this story another chance and give another review when I in the mood to read more of the chapters.

terrible review. i can't trust a review with no explanation why you like it. what make this story worthy of 5 stars. Seems too many 5 start review without a good post make 5 star feel fake or blah.

I really like this story. It has a fast pace feel to it. the Mc progression and developments is nice and description of environment is not bad. Only strong criticism is all other characters beside the mc feels flat or not developed to be support character. a small criticism is mc fights are seeming to straight forward like dragon ball fight and are too reliant on skills and not enough on tactics. would reading so strategy and tactics books help? or some fight styles book? still it's a good book and I'll keep reading it till it's not free.

while the idea of the story is good and a bit different. the execution of the story falls short. there are a lot of grammar errors, character all have flat dimension. the Mc of the story struggle seem to breeze though the problem, making story plot weak. If this story gets a strong edit,and be rewrote I will to give this story a second chance.

Will this story has potential, it give good description of background and ability for what the mc can buy. unfortunately the are some big flaws I can't ignore. one story seems rush. a lot of things are happening so fast, it doesn't seem realistic. midevil time building thing super fast with manpower shortage at the beginning. The character aren't developed well. Mc get a paragraph about himself, (beside stats update), all other characters bearly have a description, and are bots that just follow orders. also the feeling I get is his ruling is a small province not a country, and is only ruling town. it feels like a mobile game where you are constantly upgrade the town. Still I like the story. idea is there just need more detail, and thought.

all the free chapters aware great, only lacking is world background stuff. I dying to know more about the surounding. more detail please. charters express just need a little more. tight fist , for boiling point, or eye roll, or person doing a double take. I also mark average update category of update are not long enough to see a pattern. I still like this read. if i wasn't a penny pincher, I would finish the rest of the chapters.

I really enjoy reading all of the free chapters. I wish there was a choice were I can buy the whole book instead of buying in pieces/chapters. I would like to give a higher rating but I'm unable to read the further chapter for rating stability. also the action writing in this book make up for the average of description in environment. Still I enjoy this story and hope this one become a free read.[img=recommend]

I feel this story is not really a story but a wish list of a person ideal reincarnation army building game. all characters feel one sided, and no real obstacles to really over come.

ok beginning but the story felt so rushed. not enough time to develop the characters. it just felt like it was a fantasy to stroking the authors ego. one the the author was finish stroking his ego the story felt flat, and didn't even finish properly.