Cold_Steele

2mth

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This is one my favorite chapter titles. On point. Authors don’t always put a lot into them but when they do it makes a difference

Journey to the West

Shadow Slave

Fantasy · Guiltythree

Cold_Steele

2mth

Replied to Herlequine

Yes men should just write women the way women want to be written and not the way they actually see them. 🙄 Don’t be so solipsistic. Women are not the only existentence on the planet.

Currently, she was stretching her arms above her head, clearly bored and sleepy. The gesture forced the thin fabric to tighten, provocatively accentuating her full breasts.

Shadow Slave

Fantasy · Guiltythree

Cold_Steele

2mth

Replied to that_one_person

Was just about to do that. Thanks

He looked around, easily piercing the veil of darkness with his tenebrous eyes. Hero and Scholar were still in the middle of their tasks. Shifty was supposed to be looking for winter clothes, but was greedily pulling rings off the dead men's fingers instead. Unseen to them, Sunny hesitated, considering if he had really thought things through well.

Shadow Slave

Fantasy · Guiltythree

Cold_Steele

1yr

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"How is this possible? Vampires only get stronger the older they are, or if they train their skills to the fullest, just like Lady Scathach." Sasha spoke with a shocked face as she mentioned a woman I didn't know.

My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.

Fantasy · Victor_Weismann

Cold_Steele

3yr

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Firstly, I really enjoyed this story up till a while after they escaped the terares enclosure. After then they all just started acting completely out of character. It doesn’t make sense that James would all of a sudden distrust Dora or that Eli would fall in love with james after barely a day of meeting him, or that James would treat Eli coldy. All the characters except probably Rigo in my opinion are acting way way out character and context. Its not aliGgnung with who they were before. Unless you’re planning to say that James’ personality changed to a tyrant in one sec. None of this follows. Once Again this is a really good novel. The premise is one of the best I’ve read and i Like the fact that you develop each character in thier POV. BUT PLEASE make this make sense. ** please dont give up you’ve really got something good here

ch 100 Locating The Traitor