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Maybe make it so that the system blocks his emotions about the parents death to a certain amount/point makes it better

Until he gets into that other dimension he needs to cover up his class and atm 4-5 skeletons might not be enough to defend himself against some of these creatures So having the strength to at least defend himself a bit better is a good start

*speaks i 300 Dezibels*

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Serana still has to learn a lot

Im surprised how fitting his behavior is Idk why but Riley fits this just perfectly

Btw does he have the n word pass ? After all he can change his skin color so ... Lmao

I actually unlocked it while i have read it for free some hours before, gg i guess

I think you could bring the cubs into his world or find some place where he can hide them and let them grow while he looks after them from time to time, would add something like a mother figure to his persona, plus from the critic above (or below) you need to add some feelings maybe not remake previous chapters but it seems like you have to add them from now on. Abgesehen davon hast du bisher gezeigt dass du das kannst also wirst du das auch noch hinbekommen

Evtl n paar verbindende Sätze benutzen falls du das mal überarbeitest, wirkt sehr Stichpunkt artig an manchen Stellen sonst ganz nett für dein erstes Kapitel

Blood = Water ?

I actually can't understand why people would want to write death threats and shit because of a fanfic i guess they are too blinded by their own feelings about every character that they go and write such stuff. Besides that i watch/ed the anime and dont have any problems with ur fanfic. Keep up

Kinda brutal lol

Nah sry got a tumor from the 2nd chapter

Seems like he updated some chapters, its better i guess but he still makes time (tense?) mistakes

Which sin isnt fully upgraded ?

I hope malacaths children at least taste good

Nice