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one-on-one.
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his arm away.
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Then he raised his arms to push her back
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unless you’re too chicken
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his side’s numbers
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golf-like swinging arc
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the harpoon’s handle
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Pretty vicious fight!
ch 44 Chapter 44: Draw
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as a small Also you don’t need “as he spoke” at the end of the sentence .
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Alan was too close
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get too far away.
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slashed at Alan’s middle
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CHange the last sentence to: I was wondering if you could still impress me!
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Take out the first “soon”. its too redundant
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Pheonix is spelled wrong
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Ooo creepy! Good descriptive fight scene
ch 27 Chapter 27: The Thing
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Ooo! Great suspense to lead into the next chapter[img=update]
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Lisa is a great capitalist! Can’t wait to see how she gets the Gang
ch 17 Chapter 17: Next Step
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Good negotiator! Lisa acts like a pro at business
ch 15 Chapter 15: Deals
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on me too quick.
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