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you know i absolutely loved the premise of this story, yet i am very disappointed with Cole's seeming lackadasicle manner and indifference to Jeremy parents legacy being trashed and spit upon. I guess that's what happens when the isekaid person believes himself to be different from the original character. this is leading to plotline holes and reader frustration. just because he is getting money and anything he needs from the system shouldn't mean reclamation be on a back burner. iIhope you will change the character arc. I mean he resonantes more with a character template rather than the original soul of Jeremy's. hope you do better going on

Moreover, military veterans are known for their discipline. although they enjoy life they immediately revert back to a disciplined and focused mindset. So either he has lost all his military training and developmental traits or he is an unmindful, foolish and negligent personality that disgraces the respect earned by the uniform

you know when I first started reading this fic I really loved it. but going on I don't see any maturity or seriousness expected from a veteran. yes he is living his dream life but no responsible and dedicated military personnel who has not gone rogue or lost his mind will always try to minimise collateral damage. collateral damage is acceptable in times of need or missions. but in chapter 40 Julian destroyed the home of many electric Pokemon just because of his list for battle. he could have challenged zapdos and gone to an isolated location for battle. he is turning more and more despicable in his blind devotion of living life.

i absolutely adore your story. in real life it may not be possible but atleast in fanfictions true justice can be done to the victims even if you have to be a vigilante. I hope you can write a similar one in Marvel as well. also I am quite curious if need be how you will portray a protagonist in the game of thrones as a stark i.e., world building, justice oriented, etc. anyways best of luck. bye

every single time dc disappoints me. not once do they have the guts to do the right thing and be ready to face themselves. every single time they act like cowards hiding behind some made up excuses. let me say one single thing killing joker means thousands sleep with peace, killing lex means hundreds of thousands stop being experimented upon horrifically in his quest against Superman, etc. i am not saying kill petty thiefs or small time criminals but take into consideration the intention behind the criminals crime

you story is good but please use a grammar tool to remove the mistakes. just an advice

the MC's capabilities in terms of battling is good which is natural since he is a war veteran . but he doesn't act like one . he wants all the advantages of being a experienced veteran but forgets the basic principle of service before self policy propagated in the militaries of many countries around the world. he doesn't want to get back into all the darker side of things fine he could inform the gmen or Lance. he has political weight since he was a former champion. so atleast in the future when creating your character's characterization keep few things in mind, one our experiences shape us. you mentioned that he loved someone in his original life and couldn't move on after their death yet now he is a man whore towards everyone. these create huge inconsistencies.

You know the Greek pantheon is filled with cruel and I know everyones characterization is dependent upon his or her experiences, I liked the story till the part where he cuts off the horn for cornucopia and there is no regret or shame at the deed . He had the ability to find a way to heal Achleos or find another way but his cruelty towards others has disgusted me . It's the world's truth that you reap what you sow even if it may not happen immediately it will happen over a period of time. if possible please alter your characterization to have some human decency at minimum. we live in a world of unimaginable horrors and cruelty at least let the fictional world have some decency if not any righteousness. I like the way you write so good luck

good concept. hope you won't abandon the story like so many have. best of luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I've seen few who integrate indian mythology into marvel and they quickly drop those stories. it's my sincere hope that you won't drop the story.

don't worry about not being able to come back It's my belief that you will do well in your life if you work with the same vigour as you did in your Stories. I hope you will recover from your situations and all the best for your mba

It is not about being hurt or about jolly nature. We need to maintain a certain sense of decorum because by writing you are exposing the culture and environment you've grown up in, if we as Indians donot respect our culture what kind of an example would we show. I am not expressing this to embarrass you or degrade your efforts, just keep in mind your perception will not be understood 100 percent all the time by others.

write the way you want to but keep in mind that your creativity will not offend others beliefs. the hurtful part is calling lord ganesha a "smart fatty god". It not only hurts them but shows off your immaturity in not respecting others cultures and beliefs

i liked the idea very much since this is the first time I have seen this idea being propagated. hope you will not abandon the story. best of luck