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Daoist705479

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Thanks for the chapter

There was no way that Nelly could have been the very first Naiad.

Demon's Virtue

Demon's Virtue

Fantasy · DiceVR

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Chainmail cuirass maybe, not Chainmail curious

A black pair of gauntlets, beautifully crafted with fine rivets and craftsmanship, then a matching set of vambraces and spaulders, the shoulders of his armour were like black wolves howling towards the moon, with leather and chainmail curious, the leather black and red, the cuirass dull silver.

Devouring Monarch: Rebirth of the Profane Phoenix

Devouring Monarch: Rebirth of the Profane Phoenix

Fantasy · TheDragonSlayer

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"too fast a speed" not "too fats a speed"

"I was starting to wonder if you were even real. Guess you-" as Eiro tried to mock the crow, they listened along for a few moments, but before the Demon knew it, the bird monster's talons were less than inches away from Eiro's throat, about to wrap around his whole neck. And the crow had moved faster than before. A lot faster. They were... holding back against Eiro. Or at least, that's what it seemed like at first, but rather... he was able to notice the minuscule twitching in their leg. This was the drawback of the Three of Pentacles, the Ultimate Agility... that sort of speed would rip your body apart, so you needed the physical strength to support yourself. If you weren't strong or flexible enough, just the slightest movements at too fats a speed could make your muscles or tendons tear completely. So this speed was still too much for the crow's body. Though, if things worked out for them, that was fine. Eiro would die here, and the crow could rest, being healed and getting praised by the Devil.

Demon's Virtue

Demon's Virtue

Fantasy · DiceVR

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Maybe "demon sensed", not "demon senses"

Eiro viewed the village through the crows' eyes. The sun had just fully gone down, and the Demon senses an immense spike in magic not too far away. A carriage appeared on the road leading to the village, drawn by two hell-beasts. The carriage was moving much faster than before, as though the creature inside had already noticed that something was wrong.

Demon's Virtue

Demon's Virtue

Fantasy · DiceVR

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not "living not at" but " living not as"

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change one but to and in the sentence

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not sure if intended, but apart means separate, while a part means included

"Your mother? Wouldn't it be odd for us to throw a dinner on your father's birthday so you can upset Rose? I'm sure Priscilla would love to be a part of it, but I don't find it to be necessary. He is still your father and will be expecting your arrival. I am fine with staying at home," Alessandra said.

The Duke's Masked Wife

The Duke's Masked Wife

History · Violet_167

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not brung, but brought

I didn't dwell on the new highlights any longer, instead I started to style my hair. I brung it all into one bunch and made a single ponytail that fell over my shoulders with how long it was.

I Shall Evolve Everything

I Shall Evolve Everything

Fantasy · Spaceninja5789

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I'm... or I'll be... their only grandparent

"For my grandkids, I'll not allow any such regrets. I'll their only grandparent. So, it's my responsibility to spoil them. I'll give them all the love in the world. Even though their parents are more capable than me, I can give them the love of a grandfather." Evander said with a bright and determined smile.

Divine Path System

Divine Path System

Fantasy · _Transcendent

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gave, not gae

"Show it," Partax said, and one of the mechanical arms was eagerly held in front of the Demon's face. Eiro gae it to the hand and the sheet was brought closer to Partax. He pulled up one of the small gadgets that were attached to his seat, a number of magnifying glasses that would most likely help Partax inspect the quality of the engraving. After looking at the technical skill first, Partax nodded approvingly, "If it were any worse, I'd have been disappointed."

Demon's Virtue

Demon's Virtue

Fantasy · DiceVR

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ninety or ninety nine humans enough for 100 abyssals

Realistically, ninety humans would be enough for a hundred abyssals, and that 'one' human would become the extra force.

Divine Path System

Divine Path System

Fantasy · _Transcendent

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is ir still being edited?

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from SSR, not SR to UR I think

[Ding! It requires 32 billion points to evolve The Farmer House from SR to UR.]

Misty World: Start with SSS skill

Misty World: Start with SSS skill

Fantasy · HikaruKiki

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