very effective and smooth. the exasperation from the last chapter is no longer visible now that the protag no longer feels it. in fact, it is replaced by excitement and intrigue. Adrian, an another comment said, is a beautiful hypocrite. His hypocrisy is so real, so common, yet somehow special in the way he handles it. His seeming contempt for Zirav, calling him a psychopath, when he himself has simply killed eight people and felt nothing about it. Him being interested in the play he acted like he had no care for. It's all such beautiful and cyclical storytelling.
ch 0 6 Prologue 6: I find myself getting distracted
Fantasy · VoxEnozian
*his characterization
This is a like a exasperation setting in after a big dose of adrenaline wears off (referring to the fighting in previous chapter) and a tiredness and numbness taking over the tone of the story just as they take over the protagonist's mind and body. Good job with continuing to assimilate the story and the protagonist together like this.
ch 0 5 Prologue 5: I find myself confused
Fantasy · VoxEnozian
That turned into a nice little side story-ish chapter. Pretty good stuff.
ch 0 -1 A short explanation of Arts
Fantasy · VoxEnozian
very nicely put together. I like that we didn't actually see how he killed them, he just did. It's probably leading up to something bigger, esp with that part about him being the "strongest in the world".
ch 0 4 Prologue 4: I find myself alone
Fantasy · VoxEnozian
I will for sure. I'm getting more and more into your story with each chapter.
ch 0 3 Prologue 3: I find myself prideful
Fantasy · VoxEnozian
it's fine. how are you?
ch 0 2 Prologue 2: I find myself joking
Fantasy · VoxEnozian
Good structure, with the transition from comedic beginning to sad ending (at the same time, I suppose it was Adrian with a mask of indifference towards everything and that mask breaking by the end). Adrian is interesting. He is a template for much potential but you'll really need to maneuver him well if he's not to end up generic. It will be an interesting journey. Keep it up!
ch 0 2 Prologue 2: I find myself joking
Fantasy · VoxEnozian
cool
ch 0 1 Prologue 1: I find myself wondering
Fantasy · VoxEnozian
cool
ch 0 -1 Political Powers [Minor Spoilers]
Fantasy · VoxEnozian
cool
ch 0 -1 Characters [Minor spoilers]
Fantasy · VoxEnozian
Kinda. I am planning to rewrite it from the start after my exams end.
ch 194 Chapter 100: The Scent of Carnage (Part 2)
Fantasy · Zyanide100
what's yr problem? if you don't like it, drop it. stop harassing me
I see … droplets … on the ground. They are still … falling. But where … could they … be coming from? I am pretty sure … clouds weren't rainy … when I saw … them. I try to distract myself with these thoughts. I touch my head as it kept bursting, and … I realize … I am … crying.
Fantasy · Zyanide100
it does
^^
ch 60 Chapter 31: Kindness (Part 2)
Fantasy · Zyanide100
Yeah, totally.
really good chapter, a two-parter? keeup up the good work
ch 0 7 Prologue 7: I find myself sympathizing
The Emperor Who Would Rule The Gods
Fantasy · VoxEnozian