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again she was warned repeatedly and as a noble herself she should've seen it coming. she sucks as a human being and deserves death. she started not one but two civil wars due to her idiotic actions.

kill serien off. can't even manage one thing. was warned repeatedly and instead acts like the same ditz that caused her country to be involved in a civil war.

will she get her skin back?

so tactical nuke on the capital when.

author im not criticizing or anything but are you planning on making chapters more meaty. i mean im fine with you doing you its just creating alot of unintentional cliff hangers. on another note ballistic armor actually isnt that effective against piercing weapons like bows and swords. id recommend something like a stabvest or something to go along with a plate carrier. also im not sure if youre working on suspension of disbelief or not cause youre trying to be as accurate as possible when describing the guns. so id recommend something with a quick change barrel and the system to inform him bout cyclic firing so as to not overheat the barrel or weapon jams. it would also increase his accuracy as well as limit his ammo usage. of course with suspension of disbelief this doesnt matter.

great story do far. my only question is that will he find elana and nuri. kinda got invested in the family and loved ones would hate to not see em for anther hundreds of chapters.

most ppl would think you have vehemence towards any country when you put it like that. you literally copied anti us propaganda when literally every country in this would react quickly and decisively to an unaffiliated power building an emp capable of destroying humanities progress. plot device or no when ya lay it on that thick 99% of ppl are gonna think you got hatred mate regardless of which country you put there

not sure if youll see this author but one thing i forgot to mention is this is a good thing. one of the most important things in a book is getting ppl involved at a personal level. so many stories are ruined by lack of feeling from the characters but the truly great stories are like yours where we can sympathize and relate to the characters easily. i just wish i could write like yall.

ahh wasnt saying she was denying the training but her mothers confession. its more personal than that. for example i was sent to a shit school where i could easly pass any class and there was no challenge nor did it prepare me socially at all for the world. my mother understands that and regrets that choice in school however my father does not. i hated that school and can forgive my mom that because she admits to that mistake my father does not. i understand his reasoning but the fact he knows it was mistake and refuses to apologize and says hed again in a heartbeat proves he doesn't really care. in your story lilith admits her mistake and her love for lilin is apparent(granted we the viewers get a clearer perspective) so lilins reaction her does not vibe with at all and makes her seem spoiled. lets be real with what lilith went through it wouldnt be absurd that she wouldve abandoned lilin yet she didnt she raised as best she could and regrets she couldnt do better. lilith had a life devoid of life and wanted better for lilin and tried to accomplish that in the only way she could. honestly its a personal vibe as someone whose parents made a lot of mistakes during my childhood(i got extremely sick one time turned out to be appendicitis told my dad i was in excruciating pain and he told me what for my to wake up two hours later) still know that they still loved me thru those mistakes. which is why i look foward to how you write her progression. i understand the direction your going just dont like the attitude at a personal lvl. keep the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

im enjoying the book immensely reminds me slightly of strongest senior brother but more interesting as your character is nowhere near as op. only question is do plan on uploading at a faster rate.

im with you. multiple attempted murder and one successful one. ya no ill pass hopefully he kills her soon. rarely do i dislike a character this much so kudos to you author(hate in a good way not because theyre poorly written).

author great job with the story 10 outta 10. so glad you came back. not gonna lie i was scared with that little hiatus.

thanks for answering man and hope ya feel better.