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tl;dr constructive criticism, writing could be improved. There's some SAT reading and writing principles which would improve the flow of the paragraph and the story. At the top of my head: When the words or paragraphs correlate, put them closer. The information they're trying to convey would come across clearer with less chance of ambiguities and less jarring, especially when they are trying to be descriptive. If you read enough books within the complexity strata, you will get the feel (+flow) when proof reading and writing. example of complexity strata: light novel should fall within teen strata such as Harry Potter series and Percy Jackson 1st series, while complex novel such as GoT and LotR would fall within adult (21+) strata. Sherlock Holmes original series fall within adult strata, while the edited penguin publisher version of Sherlock Holmes fall within teen strata. fyi, there's also academic strata, children strata, pre-world war and post-world war strata. Just think intersectionality, but for literature (don't go crazy with the division). No matter what style of writing you chose, if the flow of the sentence and paragraph staggered or choppy (jarring choice of words or sequence of sentences, readers can't really immersed in reading and enjoy the story. IF you've read this far, thanks for sparring your time reading my semi rambling comment, I really mean well.

looking forward for the story.

this MC is looking more like an idiot right now, with inconsistency to boot.

thx for the chapters ^^

roger

WE HUNGER FOR MORE!!!! thx for the chapters btw.^W^

just... wow... thanks for the chapters ^_^

Dear good author sir, would you please lower the price for the privilege unlock? 75 coin per ch is very steep in my humble opinion, I'm no whale, just salmon @best. The whales r willing n capable of gifting u daily/weekly luxury car n above, while salmons can only starve if they dare try to act like a whale.

wishing for a Christmas mass release QQ

not to mention, that kind of spike in performance would make anyone clumsy until u can adjust; a dash or a sidestep could overshoot, u could overestimate your defense making u vulnerable, a delicate swordsmanship could crumble. If Rudra want to keep that kind of stat a secret, it's better for him to learn how to limit his stat usage with the added benefit of improving your control. the only stat u can't fake with control is defense, but then again, there's debuff mechanic.

thx for the chapter!!!

n then another

dun have enuf coin to unlock extra, bye2 cliff.....