i think the reason for why it is loosing interest is the way you show off the oc. We see less and less of him and people manly talk about him. Most just want to read a fun advebture of one person and don't really care about the other people. Especially because we didn't really got to learn your oc really well so people tend to care less and less about all this cause we know fairly little about him and his personality cause most of the story is more like a retelling about him. We never really get to know the way he thinks, feels and acts cause a lot of times so much time suddenly went past and suddenly so much changed it can be either overwhelming or just offputting. Anyways that is just my guess. I still like your story. The most important thing is that you have fun with what you write abd enjoy the journey.
ch 32 Four Friends
Book&Literature · Vincent_0580
Thanks for this great chapter. Now part of me wishes that this was how cannon happned. Although I have the feeling that you want po and tai lung to fight, cause shifu is now passed out and po will think that tai lung killed him when he sees him like that.
ch 20 Father and Son
Movies · Emmanuel_Capricorn
"You killed Sokka!" she screamed, and new ice needles and sharp ice discs flew at me, while I dodged water whips a couple of times.
Anime & Comics · Vandalizer
He can now think stupid faster. Like me on too much energy drinks.
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Anime & Comics · WeedSmokah
Thanks for the chapter.
ch 403 Chapter 400 : Hiruzen's Knowledge, Danzo's Opportunity
Fantasy · Devil_Hex
I like the premise of the novel, but basically every over chapter the author changes over to someones over perspective. It just makes it feel for me that the story developes really slowly. What I mean isn't the time in the novel as there are timeskips so that isn't the issue. It is just that we never really stay with the mc so I still have no real clue about his character. I don't see a problem for it with other dbz characters as they are already established and most of us know how they act and feel, but it can't be said for the mc and little spoiler, but the mc didn't really do anything until now. At least most of it is just offscreen things happening. Anyways the fanfic is still in its early stages, so my review will most likely change over the time, but that's it from me for now.
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Why would he be so worried tho? I mean sure Xeno could just delete him, but also a lot of other people could do the same (like everyone he interacted with until now). It's not like his situation changed much with Xeno being near as he won't be safe until he has gown signigicantly stronger, but until then he can die if he took one wrong turn or says something offensiv even if we ignore Xeno.
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I wanted to give this novel a try after years of seeing it around and I can't say anything about the new chapters, but I'm currently somewhere around chapter 50 and the there are so many simple mistakes or just weird sentence stucture mistakes that it makes it dofficult for me to no just drop it again, but I'm currently out of good novels so I'm giving it a shot in the hope that it will get better. The story is fine, the mc is someone I don't really like, but also not hate. He is fine just a bit boring. Some plotholes here and there and it sometimes lacks the feeling of distance and time. Also the dialog is not that well writen so you somtimes don't really know who is acctually talking and makes conversations feel chaotic and disjointed as if you missed a sentence from someone else or accidentily skipped it. Anyway I will continue to read it now and again and update if it gets better. (I really hope it does)
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Anime & Comics · MynameJeff