Webnovel Author: YX01 - Fanfic Collection

Very good, thank you for the Chapter, the chapter is only short for such a good fanfiction.

Thanks for the chapter. He should learn shadow clone, even if it's not to train but to study and gain more knowledge for research.

I think this fanfiction is really cool, I hope it continues to update at this rate.

"I also enjoy 'slice of life,' but the story primarily revolves around his relationships with the girls. And every time an opportunity arises for him to engage with some important characters from the main cast, he simply flees and acts like a coward. It's not enjoyable if the plot continues in this pattern of constant dragging. And I hope there's more action involving Akeno, because it's not just about drama and action, but about him overcoming his cowardice. It's noteworthy how he can't even interact with the members of his own nobility when Serafall is around, even though his relationship with his nobility predates his marriage to Sona. It's not as if anyone expected him to stop interacting with his own nobility, even though it was previously stated that he's confident in having a good chance of defeating Serafall in a confrontation. However, I don't believe it would come to a confrontation."

Bell-mère is also beautiful and hasn't been mentioned at all. It would be interesting if he suddenly started mentioning her and she managed to obtain the reward in the end. I would be surprised, not only the sisters, but all the others who have the diary. I think it would be interesting to see their reaction when they realize that a deceased person can also win the reward. And I say he should discover the diary. Bell-mère cannot be resurrected, and he doesn't know about it. An ignorant protagonist about a subject closely related to him leaves a very unpleasant feeling while reading, especially something as significant as the resurrection of a character. And he must be there to court her when she resurrects.

Bell-mère is also beautiful and hasn't been mentioned at all. It would be interesting if he suddenly started mentioning her and she managed to obtain the reward in the end. I would be surprised, not only the sisters, but all the others who have the diary. I think it would be interesting to see their reaction when they realize that a deceased person can also win the reward. And I say he should discover the diary. Bell-mère cannot be resurrected, and he doesn't know about it. An ignorant protagonist about a subject closely related to him leaves a very unpleasant feeling while reading, especially something as significant as the resurrection of a character. And he must be there to court her when she resurrects.

I hope something really happens, because I'm getting more and more tired of this story.

Talk about how to evoke reader frustration. I hope that in tomorrow's chapters, he at least brings Serafall into the mix. Let me know if there's anything else I can assist you with!

The issue isn't how many people are in your harem, but rather who they are. For instance, aside from Ravel and Sona, the others are just less important characters. I think most of us, myself included, expected the main characters from the original story to be in the harem.

The MC's attitude is really unpleasant. First with Ravel, then with Serafall. The excuse used to not engage with them is not good. If the excuse used for Ravel was already bad, Serafall's is worse. I prefer to see him acting like a slave to the system and taking action, instead of this dragging on with the girls, especially with Ravel, who has already shown to be in love with him. Being a dense MC doesn't make much sense. With the reward he received and what has been hinted so far, I think he should be able to realize that Ravel is into him.

Muito bom! Feliz que voltou a atualizar.

good chapter, now the story is getting fun.

Esse capítulo foi bom, e eu achei ele escrito melhor do que o anterior.

I think you're right, monologue must be his personality trait by now. It's better to have an mc that thinks straight than one that ruins everything because of stupidity. Still, while it's a good thing for the reader to have a sense of what the protagonist has in mind, if most of the chapter is a monologue with little advancement in the story, it becomes tiresome reading. I'm not saying to take away that personality trait, just express it in another way. For example, by a brief monologue with the information the reader needs, followed by: After that Azazel spent a few more minutes thinking about the details of what he had to do, until Fubuki arrived with the reports waking him from his thoughts. In this example, he makes it clear that the mc has a habit of being absorbed in his thoughts.

I like this story, however the mc's line of reasoning is too long. There is a lot of internal monologue filling the chapter, the plot on the other hand seems to move very slowly, which makes for a tiring read. My opinion is that I could make the line of reasoning more summarized, or write it in intervals. For example, just before he leaves for another realm, write his reasoning explaining why he is going to another realm. I like this story, if my opinion can help, it doesn't hurt to try.

Where are the chapters?😭

Author, do not make Rias wife no. I don't let his plans go through, instead make her his servant as well, maybe even give her the pawn piece. Of course, still allowing her to have her own nobility, but as his servant and pawn, she becomes part of his family, just like Akeno and the others end up being considered gremory when they became her servants. By extension making Akeno and the others, now part of the leviathan clan. This would prevent her from being forced to marry without at least challenging him as a gamer, and honestly it would be quite out of the cliché that everyone is tired of seeing. (at least I am) It's also an opportunity to take people for him from both the Phoenix and the Gremory, since they would be taking people from him if he won and one would be forced to marry, nothing fairer than betting the same, you could make lady Phoenix become his wife and even get his daughter and others from the group for him. Same for the Gremory, after the Phoenixes failed to resolve the situation. Both for failing to fulfill the marriage contract, and for the family's heiress becoming someone's servant, it causes problems both for Lord Phoenix after suffering from the loss of his wife and the reputation of the Phoenix family in this way, and for the Gremory family itself. . So in an attempt to resolve the situation, they would have to challenge him too, so he takes Rias' mother as his wife too.

It was going well! Continues!

good chapter🙂