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for those who want to know: story development 2 the rest 4 the beginnin of the story is quite boring and there are many oc characters. after about 20 to 30 chapters the story gets better and is quite enjoyable. From chapter 130 onwards the story development is taking a turn for the worse. The mc overcomes his main antagonists off without a struggle. The blackfires were established as a bigger enemy with the backing of the golden company. They were brought down by some assasin and then they were just integrated with the mc. Viserys had the potential to be this character in the family of the mc, that would betray him and give the mc problems by being jealous, … But then he just said, that his canon behaviour was just an act and he is fully ok with being cucked by the mc. In the end the mc gets all the women, that the author wants him to have and the story is being developed in such a way, that the mc has no problems. Overall that makes the story boring in the later stages and unsatisfying

I already wrote a review a year ago. i complained about the slow pace of the story up to chapter 110. I recently gave the story a second chance. It gets better. The story now develops at an acceptable pace (since around chapter 150). The info dumps are also getting rarer after chapter 160. There is a clear development of the quality of the story. The author is gett better and better. The author still needs to work on his pov. There are some strange or repetitive t parts. So there is still potential for him to get better. Overall a good but not great story.

The story is quite good for the first 50-60 chapters. But there are several problems, that the author is ignoring. The story is stronly focused on the production of the films. But after some films the writing becomes repetitive. We will develop this film. Those are the actors. We film. Then one or two chapters about the release and thats it. There is little new in the chapters. Then there are the relationships, that are highly underdeveloped. There is no real love interest for the mc. At most there are some ons with some actresses, but there is nothing about real relationships. The only character, that has some kind of relationnship, that is at least partly explored is the relationship with his uncle. In the end the mc is a workaholic, that does nothing other than producing films.

i ve seen some stories worse than this one. so i gave it 2 stars.

This is a story is a mess. The mc is introduced as the younger brother of tony, without really building on this background. Instead of a intelligent mc, that tries to create iron man armour,… through his own effort and survive in the mcu, we get someone, who get power ups and opportunities handed to him on a platter. He has to do nothing, to get his powers. There is no struggle. The mc acts like a tourist on a trip through a mcu theme park, rather than someone trying to survive this crazy universe.

This story can be great. The updates are to slow. Its been 11 week since this story started and the story is still in the prologue. Either the chapters have to get longer or the updates have to come faster. The pace is just to slow for me.

this story doesnt reach the level of your previous work. The mc is an arrogant idiot who doesnt care about the consequences of his actions. This story also gives me some chinese cultivation vibes and sadly its the bad parts of those stories, that the author is implementing in his story like the arrogant corrupt officials, that provoke the mc and the mc cant swallow the insult, for whatever reason. overall its not a story, that i want to read. Hope u can come back to the standard of ur one piece story.