Badges 6
Moments 12
Sure, and then let plot decide when he looks back on it, could be next paragraph, could be 5 chapters later, you know, because, convenience.
For some reason, Bella whined at his words as well. It was worryingly Human. And considering Padfoot was an Animagus… Oh, dear. Heather's next outburst stole my attention again and my suspicion was relegated to a corner of my mind for later.
The Grind (And Helping Heather Potter) [Complete]
Book&Literature · Daddy
Now you are just making him dumb for plot's sake, he knows his father is an animagus, and now an animal is glaring at his father very human-like, if he can't connect the dots, might as well sell his brain, because its totally unused anyway
I wasn't happy with that answer but Sirius clammed up and refused to say more. Bella cuddled closer to me as I tried to glare him into submission. Sirius wouldn't be budged.
The Grind (And Helping Heather Potter) [Complete]
Book&Literature · Daddy
How is shadow here, she was left behind, eating Friskies from her bowl when the portkey activated, don't tell me, she is the ultra rare mega rare mary sue gary stu familiar with infinite powers over shadow and darkness and rules over all....
Shadow, having hitched a ride on my shoulder and surprisingly not complaining about the portkey trip, hopped down and went to explore. Still smiling like a madman, I transfigured a catflap into the door of my room. She'd like that. She'd never had free reign of Hogwarts, even when I was still a student here.
The Grind (And Helping Heather Potter) [Complete]
Book&Literature · Daddy
Did that strong will go away for plot convenience, that allowed him to tolerate those migraines for a week? Yes it id the Joker, but still, a whole system should be more powerful than a maniac, it's not Darkseid and his Universe bending powers.
Facing down the beast in human skin, Ethan couldn't do anything. His feet refused to listen to him every time he wanted to run. He was paralyzed in fear. The boy's mouth opened and closed, mutely trying to say something but couldn't.
Game Designer in DC
Anime & Comics · Dragonarrow20
Be mindful of the changing POVs, they change the flow when you start reading in first person from third person. Hope you can continue to develop more with the story. Nice work!
And that was what our debate was about. Mr. Stevens takes a well-liked approach to history by lecturing for an hour and a half and then leaving the last 30 minutes of his class as a discussion on the material covered. He will randomly split the class into groups and have us all build arguments on each side's various pros and cons to defend our side and counter the other.
Game Designer in DC
Anime & Comics · Dragonarrow20
A certified leg/thigh man, I see, but I don't like how Akeno's legs don't get a mention, or her oppai, it's a DxD fic, not mentioning them should be a crime XD
A beautiful girl with crimson red hair and a voluptuous body muttered with a calm expression. She had blue-green eyes with long hair that was reaching down her creamy thighs.
I'm Issei Hyoudou who bake Cookies
Anime & Comics · HumblePoet
Slow down man, first make a Forrest Gump or an ET, those are in your budget rn. Then, start the MCU (I don't remember you saying whether Marvel is there in the fictionverse or not, but it must be, if Iron Man is going to armor up)..
The actor that Will mentioned was none other than Robert Downey Jr., mostly known for his role of iron-man.
My Hollywood System
Movies · DreamThree
Doesn't that mean that she also sleeps at 3 am, and is also a snitch🤭?
Unlike how I believed her to react, she just smirked. "What will I do? I will tell Mom that you've been sleeping late recently. Reading those history books of yours. I wonder how she would react if she finds out that her 'little strawberry' sleeps at 3 A.M."
The Cursed Gamer
Anime & Comics · Master4thWall
It's the first person, so please change Xenon to I/me/we whichever is relevant, it broke the flow and I had to re-check the POV.
Hershel collected himself impressively quickly, knowing full well that he is still responsible for the rest of his family and should look out for their future. He discussed with Xenon the details for their relocation.
The Unbound (Multiverse: The Walking Dead, Game of Thrones?)
TV · Xenon_graves
What, no!! Switch that up, so that it makes some sense!
A rotten apple was still better than a healthy potato.
My Hollywood System
Movies · DreamThree
And of course, plot armor says that Bella is all fine and dandy, and not at all in even worse condition than Sirius, since, you know, she also suffered at the hands of Voldemort before prison.....but, of course she is fine, how else will she be a devoted follower of her son and ultimate coven member :)
In all, I couldn't say I was happy with the events of that night but I was content enough for now. Padfoot's claim of parentage was… acceptable, I guess? He didn't seem like a bad person, though it was clear he was heavily flawed and damaged. I would expect nothing less from someone who was currently dying thanks to 13 years in what had to be one of the worst prisons on Earth.
The Grind (And Helping Heather Potter) [Complete]
Book&Literature · Daddy