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Then i see no reason to put one to begin with. Your system should be replaced with mc deity. Knowledge, advice, and wisdom is something that can be expected from god. It is literally helpful for you to develop some relationship between mc and god. Other than that it doesn't provide any buff to the mc(those combat skills are unnecessary, just give the mc a skill that provides a bonus buff or something), how can it be useful?

and mind telling me that basic abilities, strength, agility, all of them do not look like a system at all. they literally said you need to UPDATE to level up. That's what we call the system. God/Goddess is a player, adventurer is character like rpg games. There are a lot of danmachi fanfic with extra systems, and either last for a few chapters or become really bad fanfic.

why did you put another system into the danmachi world when there is one already ?

it's kind of boring if all the stats max out. From a game perspective, yeah it's a grind. But real life perspective, it takes away the progression for mc. Mc without flaw and good at everything. He can be a mage, tank, or anything. At least make it variable like Bell, sometimes his endurance is highest, or his agility and so on.

you shouldn't make silver have too much stat before lvl up, just limit it with a calculable number. Those J#### mean nothing, when making a comparison.

yeah...out of here

seems like this arc is a mistake since author admit it

what was that? is that will improve this fanfic quality?

why did you question me about wether haru can use system while his on quest? you just made that didn't you? also, tatsuya power is op but not really versatile...insta kill, insta heal, structural analysis-like...whats the point haru go to multiple world? f**k multiple girl? and last, his reward for complete mission. Whats wrong? haru can read woman by communicate with their breast right? grace ocean to farm fish? turn a person into book and read everything about that guy? does haki not work anymore? where gura gura no mi? thats the main problem...you give him a lot of weird reward but did not use at all. you can just turn the reward into point so he can adapt for future. it just reward for s** with his woman. haru go to hunterxhunter world just to learn nen, so where it goes? those penguin world, unlimited libido something, what he got? still can live without doing it right? before this, i just turn blind in hope for improvement...fate apocrypha and mahouka...why he goes to those world? i cant help but need to critic about this. at least have some goal when travel to another world...not just for women use ability efficiently, gain wisdom, outsmart the stronger opponent

i look at the review and it looks...nice? same guy wrote the same thing, unlimited alphabet spam work

Haru want elemental sight does not make any sense. first, its because it useful, but how useful it can be? haru had haki which is extremely versatile, an ability which reveal a book and collect more information about someone, and there is literally SYSTEM AND HOLY GRAIL FOR ANYTHING HE WANT... this is why its boring, fight is just like 1 PARAGRAPH, ONCE AGAIN ONE PARAGRAPH, idc tatsuya has limiter at that point, tell me which fight is epic and memorable? none. unless haru fight at toriko then there is intense battle also doesnt anybody felt cringe everytime haru sing? and there is literally a lyric?

some of your point are invalid first, of course tatsuya will do anything to protect miyuki... its literally same with haru(going crazy and frantic just because sora sick) the battle is boring, how paragraph did it take to fight tatsuya? only 1... and there is 2 chapter for duel( 1 for erika and 1 PARAGRAPH for tatsuya) about the power...thats why dont give haru weird and nonsense power like reading woman breast(issei power) etc, because at the end he is not gonna use it...haru scare to tatsuya elemental sight? bish he got whole system to buy any power he want...plus he got haki, the book that reveal about person when he touch them, bloody GRAIL i dont want to talk about girls iq anymore, just simple common sense got treat like thermonuclear formula