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the problem is that he treats the crystal ball as if it were obniscient, and hirusen in worse hokage as if he really cared about someone other than minato, kushina, his students and maybe some descendants of clans. It is impossible for the old man to have constant surveillance time, even less someone with mental problems. but the biggest problem is that the protagonist is so exaggeratedly Edgi that he doesn't seem human. I would even say that his way of thinking is more edgi than sasuke when he was in the village and that is saying a lot.

I hope it won't be so exaggerated in the future. you know, it breaks the experience, feels forced.

I agree, it shows that this novel is Chinese or has a lot of influence from Chinese novels. it is too exaggerated in the actions and thoughts of characters. Deaths are fine, but at least I hope they're justified, not just slapped because someone got offended. and excuse me, my english is not good.

Some comments that I hope will be constructive. 1 - This story is incredible, but it is far from being a FF, if Thor continues without evolving his way of being, you will be very limited when you have to interact with the Canon characters. 2 – The only thing we know about this Thor is that he likes to fight, drink, forge and that is what his personality is based on. Even when he slept with Sif he didn't even react. 3 – I think you should concentrate a couple of chapters on defining in more detail Thor's way of thinking towards women, because at the moment it's Kratos 2.0, he fucks them and that's it. Remember you chose dxd which is a Romance and Hechi series. And if I don't speak English, but your story is incredible, 9/10 for sure.