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This novel is great in many ways but falls short in a few key aspects that make it hard for me to feel motivated to read it. One point is that most of the mc's progression is tied to meeting random people that are the top of their field or just being extremely lucky. This makes the story feel lackluster in my opinion because he rarely has to figure out how to overcome problems by himself, he just asks his super over powered buddy for some help. I also find that the thought process is mostly telling the reader rather than showing. This creates very weird moments in the story when two lines of dialogue are separated by a paragraph of thoughts. I was a big fan of god's eyes and will probably read this as well because the world building and grammar are exceptional in grain's stories. Personally I believe these novels would be better with less immediate payouts like how shana met mc and then just this one interaction allowed the mc to acquire an extremely expensive item. Would have perhaps been better if shana was saved from the dungeon then the spear was gifted ( a more reasonable series of events). Great work author and hope to see you improving your craft as time goes on. though I believe some of these issues are derived from writing three novels at once.

this is a great story and I love the way it develops. you really just want to see Ren succeed in his tribulations. Overall I have no issues with the story besides easy to fix grammatical errors that could be quickly corrected in one reread through