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or "not happy" both would work
This makes the fifth kobolds Alex killed in less than two minutes; however, he was happy because Artemia was already on her eighth kill.
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Fantasy · Nickaido
boo for the emergency but yay for your return. I hope things are going better for you.
ch 152 Chapter 150: Final Day Of The Tournament (Part-1)
The Sex Beast System (The World Of Systems)
Urban · Roeselawik
woot I brought us up another rank
ch 278 Chapter 265: First Night inside a Dungeon
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Fantasy · Nickaido
not as peaceful as it appears. nothing but as peaceful means that it is a as peaceful as it appears to be.
''Well, although I'm surprised as well, what Artemia said isn't wrong. We must focus especially in such strange environment; this forest is nothing but peaceful as it appears.'' Alex warned in turn.
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Fantasy · Nickaido
I would agree if dropping some words here and there were more consistent. also the character talking is suppose to be the smarter of the thugs.
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Fantasy · Nickaido
Men bow. Gennerally with their left hand over their heart and their right along their waist line behind them. This shows respect and also puts one in a less defended position showing vulnerability and deference.
Alex curtsied to pay his respect.
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Fantasy · Nickaido
Umm. So either Silvia is for telling Sebastian's death here or you need to switch "didn't die" for "doesn't die"
〖Even though he knew you are stronger than him, he still wants to fight you. It's a way to put pressure on himself to advance further on his path as a Swordsman. Fight against a stronger opponent to hone your skills. I like this mindset of his, if he didn't die in the future, he will become a great Swordsman and great adventurer.〗Silveria who stayed oddly silent on the way finally spoke, praising Sebastian's mentality.
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Fantasy · Nickaido
Her eyes dimmed
Meera's eyes deemed for a moment, smiling bitterly she said, ''Well, stuff happens, it's complicated.''
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Fantasy · Nickaido
Water, turn into the whip that brings judgment on my enemies. Brought is past tense and doesn't flow. A or the both work but the just feels better, it holds a bit more conviction. A whip gives the feeling that any would do.
[Water, turn into a whip that brought judgment upon my enemies!]
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Fantasy · Nickaido
"Conrad hadd once supervised their first rank up." The duplication of supervised is unnecessary and only confusing.
Finally sighing while thinking that Eleonora had hidden pretty well, Conrad smiled nonetheless. This batch of rookies taking part in the rank-up test was promising with a lot of monsters in it. He was looking forward to the day they would all become higher ranked Adventurers, and who knows maybe they would remember that he, Conrad had one supervised, supervised their first rank up test.
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Fantasy · Nickaido
Because of the small magical power This is the correct sentence structure. Please feel free to delete any comments of this nature once the grammar is fixed. I enjoy the story so far and don't want individuals to stop over such things. Keep up the good work.
In other words, a magic item. Because of the magic small power they contained (to maintain the runes engraved on it to keep it functioning), they tended to attract looks from the public eye, that was why even Alex, who couldn't sense foreign magic power like elf or Mage, could tell if it was a magic item.
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Fantasy · Nickaido
You either kill or be killed. This is the correct phrase.
As for Alex's mental condition after having killed another human for the first time, he was feeling okay as if he had done nothing in the first place. In this world where the strong rules, you kill or either be killed.
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Fantasy · Nickaido
"Good luck, daughter." Is the correct prase. While both words mean the same wishing someone luck is a positive thing. "good chance" is more of a sarcastic response showing a lack of belief in the possibility.
''Good chance my daughter,'' Smith said while praying for his daughter's success, the boy's future is limitless, he is not against the idea of his daughter being near or be part of Alex's life. Leena never does something without being sure of it, which will mean Alex is talented and his potential is limitless and he's also an otherworlder (with Otherworlder bonus [More stat points and BP compared to the natives of this world.]).
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Fantasy · Nickaido
We're or we are. Depends on if the charecter is trying to be more sophisticated or not. If so then we are would be more appropriate.
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Fantasy · Nickaido
Sipping not seeping
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Fantasy · Nickaido
With a smile that those who k ow her wouldn't call a smile.
With a smile that does who knows her wouldn't call a smile, Maria replies.
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Fantasy · Nickaido
definitely a unique experience not just smut but also a story that is quite interesting. so far my biggest complaint is that we need more updates. please update.
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Urban · Roeselawik