It was at this point that I thought “can I please, please, please go through and proofread this?” because I am having a bit of difficulty reading it. I love the concept and I love the story but the grammar and word-usage is hurting my head… if I were any less stubborn or less enamored by the story, I would’ve already stopped reading it.
The slight sound of the footstep entering Li Lian's room. Jun Wei walks slowly inside her room and then looks at the girl's sleeping face. The girl's face looks innocent she looks like she was in peace. His gaze was burning, he raises his hand and softly caresses her black hair.
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